View source for Talk:Creating a positive culture around failure in project management

== reviewed by Saeh0803 ==

To start with I would place the Introduction in the beginning of the document, followed by a table of content and please add some more sentences in introduction to describe the topic :)
I miss introduction of your topic..

long sentences, make them a bit shorter :)

Over all i like your topic and your article, your English is understandable..
some part is very short, maybe you can describe a bit more, so it gives sense for reader. (if it is possible)


I hope you can use my comments
best of luck

''Thank you, hereby done''

== Sube - Review ==

Greetings 

Congratulation! you have wrote a wiki style article:)
''Thank you ;)''

First of all, I think your writing skills are very sufficient, all text is readable and make sense! Which is very nice...

Secondly, I believe that the combination of topics your chose is relevant and I see the purpose, eventhough it havent been tried out in practice:)

Thirdly, NOTE that the review text will flow out of screen to the right hand side... I do not know how to fix this!

Nevertheless, I have made you some recommendations on how I believe the article can improve.

General Guidelines;
 * Quotes are hidden in the text, maybe make them Italic, so they stand out from the normal text. Btw, you got a lot of quotes which I think is good:)
''Good idea! I will definitely integrate this''
 * As a reader im wondering, which organisations benefits from the methodology you describe? Can any organisation benefit from this, or is it more innovation oriented organisation? - maybe in the limitation of the method. I know you write the method is for projects managers - but are there any other limitations... 
''That is a good question and i see that i failed to mention is, so i will put it in limitations (that i also thought was lacking something, so thanks!)'' 
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'''Start''': 
 * When I am entering the page, the first thing I see is a table of contents. I think it would be beneficial if you peptalked the topic a bit before the content is presented. That way around, as a reader you make more sense of the table of content, and know why this topic is even relevant.
 * You could add the Article Category there aswell, maybe in the end. 
''Yea, i didn't know we were ment to move this, but great! I found out how to do it. ''
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'''Introduction''' 
 * I believe this section is more like "Research Area" or "Scope". I feel like an introduction is more about the topic and the reason why it is relevant - You could make a abstract/intro to intreak the reader and then rename the Introduction. 
 * Where are the Embracing Failure Key values? It sounds interresting:) I cannot find them!
''I see what you're saying. I will take it into account..'' 

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'''Acceptance of failure'''
 * Minor thing: I wondered who Cass was, untill it maked sense, Cassidy. Might want to edit Cass to Cassidy.
''I found it, done''
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'''Learn from your mistakes'''
 * Consider some general writing about Single and Double Loop learning... 
''That is a great idea. I will try''

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'''How is embracing failure used'''
 * I think you might want to descibe what the Fuzzy Front End is all about, I kind of get it, but I am not sure... 
 * Revisit this sentence; Embracing Failures role in the Fuzzy Front End of a project The first stages of a project or the planning part of a program are identified as the Fuzzy Front End (FFE), which hold a lot of importance in the execution of the project.
 * Remember Fuzzy Front End, some parts it is fuzzy front end. - Maybe use the FFE - but personally I belive Fuzzy Front End sounds good:)
 * Make sure you do this; "This has also served as an inspiration to the thesis of the concrete implementation suggestions this article is presenting."
''Well i think this misunderstanding comes from a spelling error. Hereby corrected and FFE is used Caption.''
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'''The original Spiral Model'''
 * Minor thing; Remember to make puncturemarks after each bulletpoint.
''Check''
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'''Adaption of the Spiral Model'''
 * I think adaptation or application is more correct - do not kill me if I am wrong.
''You're right''
 
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'''Visualized testing and prototyping area'''
 * Visualized testing and prototype areas?
 * First sentence: Remove "from it".
''Check''

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'''Discussion of the method'''
 * Nevertheless is in one word:)
 * Last section; long sentence...
''"Check"''
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'''Conclusion'''
 * The start is klumpsy "It has in this article been tried... " - rewrite:) Maybe something like; "This article provides projects managers with a method to improve their blabla.."
 * Second section, revisit the whole sentence "...the Spiral Model should be able to help with in..." I get the point but make sure to visualise that it is a "indskudt sætning":)
''Super''

Nice article:) Hope you can make use of my recommendations... Good Luck Have Fun!
''Tak for hjælpen!''