Talk:Causal Loop Diagram - Revision history

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2014-12-02T18:52:55Z

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	** The references are the small numbers in brackets throughout the article. The number is also a shortcut to the reference list, where all the references are shortcuts for the source of the reference. Do you mean, that the shortcut for the reference itself should be stated in the text?		** The references are the small numbers in brackets throughout the article. The number is also a shortcut to the reference list, where all the references are shortcuts for the source of the reference. Do you mean, that the shortcut for the reference itself should be stated in the text?
			''''''Bold text'''No I ment the diagram, because I did not knew that it was made by your selv, sorry for that '''

	- It would be nicer to add the conclusion on a separate point and avoid word repetitions within the same sentence such as: to avoid, is caused.		- It would be nicer to add the conclusion on a separate point and avoid word repetitions within the same sentence such as: to avoid, is caused.

Emmha at 13:40, 1 December 2014

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	*''to reflect and '''advance''' the process. I would write '''streamline'''		*''to reflect and '''advance''' the process. I would write '''streamline'''
			** I wouldn't use streamline, because that is not the desired effect. I have changed it to improve.
	*''By examining the dynamics in the CLD, project managers can use it as a decision tool and be aware ...		*''By examining the dynamics in the CLD, project managers can use it as a decision tool and be aware ...
	*''since the project manager cannot frame all the effects and causes intuitively as they interrelate differently. The activity of diagramming the CLD consists of the project manager revising and organizing the complexity, ...		*''since the project manager cannot frame all the effects and causes intuitively as they interrelate differently. The activity of diagramming the CLD consists of the project manager revising and organizing the complexity, ...

Emmha at 12:44, 1 December 2014

2014-12-01T12:44:11Z

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	Over all the structure of the article is very nice, many sources and it is easy to read. You have described the topic very well in a very understandable way.		Over all the structure of the article is very nice, many sources and it is easy to read. You have described the topic very well in a very understandable way.
	The litterature you have used, is very reliable and trustworthy. I miss references for the loop diagrams.		The litterature you have used, is very reliable and trustworthy. I miss references for the loop diagrams.

			** I made the causal loop diagrams myself. The population rate CLD is a classic example but I don't think that I can reference to someone who did it first. Do you mean reference in the text?


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	- I would state in the article where the references are used so the reader can take a look at them while reading.		- I would state in the article where the references are used so the reader can take a look at them while reading.

			** The references are the small numbers in brackets throughout the article. The number is also a shortcut to the reference list, where all the references are shortcuts for the source of the reference. Do you mean, that the shortcut for the reference itself should be stated in the text?

	- It would be nicer to add the conclusion on a separate point and avoid word repetitions within the same sentence such as: to avoid, is caused.		- It would be nicer to add the conclusion on a separate point and avoid word repetitions within the same sentence such as: to avoid, is caused.

			** That makes good sense, I will try to do that.

	- Find synonyms for (in relation to) in 'What is a Causal Loop Diagram?' first paragraph.		- Find synonyms for (in relation to) in 'What is a Causal Loop Diagram?' first paragraph.

			** I will do that, thank you.

	- From my point of view there are some grammatical mistakes, although they are just tiny details that can be fixed with a word translator. Here are some notes with the changes included:		- From my point of view there are some grammatical mistakes, although they are just tiny details that can be fixed with a word translator. Here are some notes with the changes included:

			** Thank you for pointing out every single sentense that you would rephrase, it must have taken some time.

	'''ABSTRACT''' :		'''ABSTRACT''' :
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	I hope this is helpful and good job! Kind regards.		I hope this is helpful and good job! Kind regards.

			** Thank you for the nice feedback, which I find constructive and helpful at the same time.

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2014-11-25T22:59:13Z

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	*''to reflect and '''advance''' the process. '''~~is it~~ streamline?'''		*''to reflect and '''advance''' the process. I would write '''streamline'''
	*''By examining the dynamics in the CLD, project managers can use it as a decision tool and be aware ...		*''By examining the dynamics in the CLD, project managers can use it as a decision tool and be aware ...
	*''since the project manager cannot frame all the effects and causes intuitively as they interrelate differently. The activity of diagramming the CLD consists of the project manager revising and organizing the complexity, ...		*''since the project manager cannot frame all the effects and causes intuitively as they interrelate differently. The activity of diagramming the CLD consists of the project manager revising and organizing the complexity, ...

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2014-11-25T22:58:14Z

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	I myself am not an expert in English, I could not give you feedback on grammatical and punctuation errors, but your article is written in a very understandable and simple language.		I myself am not an expert in English, I could not give you feedback on grammatical and punctuation errors, but your article is written in a very understandable and simple language.

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			Overall your article has a good size and the topic you have chosen is written in an interesting way, with continuous examples that help understanding the theory.

			In addition, I like the fact that you have both included and commented figures throughout your paper as well as making a good set of references that complement your article.
			It is an engaging topic with a nice flow due to connections made between the distinct points.


			Below I include some corrections and comments that I personally think will improve your wiki article:

			- I would state in the article where the references are used so the reader can take a look at them while reading.

			- It would be nicer to add the conclusion on a separate point and avoid word repetitions within the same sentence such as: to avoid, is caused.

			- Find synonyms for (in relation to) in 'What is a Causal Loop Diagram?' first paragraph.

			- From my point of view there are some grammatical mistakes, although they are just tiny details that can be fixed with a word translator. Here are some notes with the changes included:


			'''ABSTRACT''' :

			*''to reflect and '''advance''' the process. '''is it streamline?'''
			*''By examining the dynamics in the CLD, project managers can use it as a decision tool and be aware ...
			*''since the project manager cannot frame all the effects and causes intuitively as they interrelate differently. The activity of diagramming the CLD consists of the project manager revising and organizing the complexity, ...
			*''cause confusion in the reader, ...
			*''feedback loops have to be considered ...
			*''to what variables are causing problems ...


			'''HISTORY''' :
			*''but it's the basis for creating feedback ...

			'''WHAT IS A CAUSAL LOOP DIAGRAM?''' :
			*''In the second paragraph: first and last line: create instead of creates ... As well as in the first line of 'Feedback Loops'.
			*''where the variable is a set of causes that ...

			'''DIFFERENT DYNAMIC BEHAVIOR''' :
			*''behavior instead of behaviour ...
			*''The dynamics of growth with overshoot are the result ...

			'''HOW TO CREATE A CLD''' :
			*''I would rather write: what this variable affects and how the effect is (or use question marks) ...

			'''CLD IN PROJECT MANAGEMENT''' :
			*''is performing better since one diagram is mapping the causes and the effects ...

			'''APPLICATION OF CLD''' :
			*''The events that are interesting to illustrate in the CLD have to be found.

			'''CLD APPLICATION EXAMPLE: A PRODUCT DEVELOPMENT SYSTEM''' :
			*''needs to be developed and put into practice.
			*''the goodwill towards the manager.
			*''have less variance on their schedule since they now have to ...
			*''By having more overtime the costs will be affected and increased, ...


			I hope this is helpful and good job! Kind regards.

HuHe at 21:01, 25 November 2014

2014-11-25T21:01:12Z

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	Over all the structure of the article is very nice, many sources and it is easy to read. You have described the topic very well in a very understandable way.		Over all the structure of the article is very nice, many sources and it is easy to read. You have described the topic very well in a very understandable way.
	The ~~litteratur~~ you have used, is very reliable and trustworthy. I miss references for the loop diagrams.		The litterature you have used, is very reliable and trustworthy. I miss references for the loop diagrams.

HuHe at 21:00, 25 November 2014

2014-11-25T21:00:07Z

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	Over all the structure of the article is very nice, many sources and it is easy to read. You have described the topic very well in a very understandable way.		Over all the structure of the article is very nice, many sources and it is easy to read. You have described the topic very well in a very understandable way.
	The litteratur you have used, is very reliable and trustworthy.		The litteratur you have used, is very reliable and trustworthy. I miss references for the loop diagrams.


	'''Feedback on grammatical- and punctuation errors'''		'''Feedback on grammatical- and punctuation errors'''

	I myself am not an expert in English, I could not give you feedback on grammatical and punctuation errors, but your article is written in a very understandable and simple language.		I myself am not an expert in English, I could not give you feedback on grammatical and punctuation errors, but your article is written in a very understandable and simple language.

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2014-11-25T20:50:30Z

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Over all the structure of the article is very nice, many sources and it is easy to read. You have described the topic very well in a very understandable way.
The litteratur you have used, is very reliable and trustworthy.

'''Feedback on grammatical- and punctuation errors'''

I myself am not an expert in English, I could not give you feedback on grammatical and punctuation errors, but your article is written in a very understandable and simple language.

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	In addition, I like the fact that you have both included and commented figures throughout your paper as well as making a good set of references that complement your article.		In addition, I like the fact that you have both included and commented figures throughout your paper as well as making a good set of references that complement your article.
	It is an engaging topic with a nice flow due to connections made between the distinct points.		It is an engaging topic with a nice flow due to the connections made between the distinct points.


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	'''HISTORY''' :		'''HISTORY''' :
	*''but it's the basis for creating feedback ...		*''but it's the basis for creating feedback ...


	'''WHAT IS A CAUSAL LOOP DIAGRAM?''' :		'''WHAT IS A CAUSAL LOOP DIAGRAM?''' :
	*''In the second paragraph: first and last line: create instead of creates ... As well as in the first line of 'Feedback Loops'.		*''In the second paragraph: first and last line: create instead of creates ... As well as in the first line of 'Feedback Loops'.
	*''where the variable is a set of causes that ...		*''where the variable is a set of causes that ...


	'''DIFFERENT DYNAMIC BEHAVIOR''' :		'''DIFFERENT DYNAMIC BEHAVIOR''' :
	*''behavior instead of behaviour ...		*''behavior instead of behaviour ...
	*''The dynamics of growth with overshoot are the result ...		*''The dynamics of growth with overshoot are the result ...


	'''HOW TO CREATE A CLD''' :		'''HOW TO CREATE A CLD''' :
	*''I would rather write: what this variable affects and how the effect is (or use question marks) ...		*''I would rather write: what this variable affects and how the effect is (or use question marks) ...


	'''CLD IN PROJECT MANAGEMENT''' :		'''CLD IN PROJECT MANAGEMENT''' :
	*''is performing better since one diagram is mapping the causes and the effects ...		*''is performing better since one diagram is mapping the causes and the effects ...


	'''APPLICATION OF CLD''' :		'''APPLICATION OF CLD''' :
	*''The events that are interesting to illustrate in the CLD have to be found.		*''The events that are interesting to illustrate in the CLD have to be found.


	'''CLD APPLICATION EXAMPLE: A PRODUCT DEVELOPMENT SYSTEM''' :		'''CLD APPLICATION EXAMPLE: A PRODUCT DEVELOPMENT SYSTEM''' :