Talk:The benefits of systems engineering
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It is a bit hard to comment on your structure when it is not completed, but so far it seems good. | It is a bit hard to comment on your structure when it is not completed, but so far it seems good. | ||
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| + | * As I can see, the article is not finished, however the topic sounds to be interesting and I would like to read it when it is done | ||
| + | * Writing language and style is of good quality, yet I do not think it is professional to mention personal relations to the topic | ||
| + | * Seems like you have a good framework of writing, you use the references, figures, and have a total contents of the article in mind, I believe it can become a good article when you finish it | ||
Revision as of 22:55, 22 September 2015
Mette: Looking forward to read more of your article when it is more completed.
KB1991, reviewer 3:
- I have an idea that the article isn’t completely finished yet ☺ But when looking at the structure of it and the headlines it looks good - Both the formatting and the read threat.
- Good that you have planned to implement figures to illustrate the text.
- There are a few mistakes where words have been swapped, like writing ‘with’ instead of ‘which’.
- Good that there are references to all the text – And looks like the sources is of good quality.
- Would have been nice to read more of the article ☺
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S150801 Reviewer 1
The Benefits of Systems Engineering
Overall impression
I can see that you are not quite finished her yet. However, I am looking forward to read it when completed.
- I think it is an article with a good flow and easy to read.
- I like your consequent use where to put your references.
- And I think it is good that you are referring to illustrations in you text, I think this will make it easier to understand your points.
Rooms for improvement
- You are talking about many interesting topics, but I am a bit concern that you are covering too much topics in this article.
- I would be a bit careful to draw in too many personal experiences. (Like you mention in the Summary)
- Maybe you can link to other articles in you text, for example where you talk about PERT charts.
- I also think you can make the paragraphs smaller, but I think this will fix it self when you get the diagrams in.
It is a bit hard to comment on your structure when it is not completed, but so far it seems good.
S141931 Reviewer 2
- As I can see, the article is not finished, however the topic sounds to be interesting and I would like to read it when it is done
- Writing language and style is of good quality, yet I do not think it is professional to mention personal relations to the topic
- Seems like you have a good framework of writing, you use the references, figures, and have a total contents of the article in mind, I believe it can become a good article when you finish it
