Talk:Manage Extreme Projects with Rapid Methodology
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* The article follows the “method” structure very well. | * The article follows the “method” structure very well. | ||
+ | ** ✓ | ||
* There are some grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors, maybe an extra proofreading would be a good idea (maybe by someone else, it is often helpful having a second pair of eyes read it through). | * There are some grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors, maybe an extra proofreading would be a good idea (maybe by someone else, it is often helpful having a second pair of eyes read it through). | ||
+ | ** I have to say that I absolutely agree with you. After extra proofreading I made same changes that, I think, made the text more understandable and easier to follow. | ||
* The article is written in an engaging style in terms of content, but some sentences are a bit long and hard to follow. | * The article is written in an engaging style in terms of content, but some sentences are a bit long and hard to follow. | ||
+ | ** Same I said above applies here :) | ||
* The figure is very illustrative, but a reference to the source for it might be a good idea. More figures would improve the reading experience, but I do not know if it is possible to find other relevant figures. | * The figure is very illustrative, but a reference to the source for it might be a good idea. More figures would improve the reading experience, but I do not know if it is possible to find other relevant figures. | ||
+ | ** I drew the figure myself but I was inspired from DeCarlo's book so as you said it is a good idea to reference it. I also added a new figure to illustrate the uncertainty explained in the second section. Good suggestion. | ||
* Very nice use of table and bullet points. | * Very nice use of table and bullet points. | ||
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* The topic is clear and specific. | * The topic is clear and specific. | ||
* The length of the article seems appropriate. | * The length of the article seems appropriate. | ||
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* There is a red thread through the article, however, the transition from XPM to Rapid Methodology could be smoother. | * There is a red thread through the article, however, the transition from XPM to Rapid Methodology could be smoother. | ||
+ | ** I don't exactly know what you mean by "red thread" but I tried to make a more smoother transition with a short introduction. | ||
* The starting summary is sufficient and not too long. | * The starting summary is sufficient and not too long. | ||
+ | ** ✓ | ||
* Your sources seem good and of high quality. You could maybe elaborate some of them (the “annotated bibliography” part). | * Your sources seem good and of high quality. You could maybe elaborate some of them (the “annotated bibliography” part). | ||
+ | ** ✓ I forgot to annotate the bibliography like the assignment says, thank you for telling! | ||
* The use of the word “we” in some sentences is a bit confusing for me as it mixes up your “own opinion” with statements substantiated by literature. | * The use of the word “we” in some sentences is a bit confusing for me as it mixes up your “own opinion” with statements substantiated by literature. | ||
+ | ** ✓ Even though I only found one "we" you are right, it sounded a little confusing so I rewrite not only this sentence but also other statements that sounded own opinion while were not. Thank you for the constructive feedback. | ||
== Reviewer 3: s141586 == | == Reviewer 3: s141586 == | ||
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• The article follows a clear “method” structure. <br> | • The article follows a clear “method” structure. <br> | ||
• In general, too long sentences. I have detected many grammatical errors, needs proofreading. <br> | • In general, too long sentences. I have detected many grammatical errors, needs proofreading. <br> | ||
+ | ** As I said to the reviewer 1, I have to say that you are also absolutely right. After extra proofreading I made same changes that, I think, made the text more understandable and easy to follow. Regarding the grammatical errors, I found some misspelling and mismatching between verb and subject. Hope it looks better now. | ||
• The use of the form “we” it does not sounds very good in an academic article, I would rather use the passive form to express the same (Overview section) <br> | • The use of the form “we” it does not sounds very good in an academic article, I would rather use the passive form to express the same (Overview section) <br> | ||
+ | ** This was also suggested for reviewer one, and I agree with you both. The sentence has been rewritten. | ||
• Well-referenced and good use of quotes from authors. <br> | • Well-referenced and good use of quotes from authors. <br> | ||
• Some more figures would be useful<br> | • Some more figures would be useful<br> | ||
+ | ** ✓ | ||
• Well formatted. Wiki references. <br><br> | • Well formatted. Wiki references. <br><br> | ||
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• It is a very interesting topic for a practitioner, but I have the feeling that some of the statements are being repeated in too many paragraphs (specially the ones defining the XPM). <br> | • It is a very interesting topic for a practitioner, but I have the feeling that some of the statements are being repeated in too many paragraphs (specially the ones defining the XPM). <br> | ||
• The length seems to be ok, even that is around 2500 words. It has a good flow. <br> | • The length seems to be ok, even that is around 2500 words. It has a good flow. <br> | ||
+ | **✓ After your suggestions some text has been added so now it is nearly 3000. | ||
• I miss a “limitations” paragraph, were you explain the weaknesses of the XPM or when to apply it. <br> | • I miss a “limitations” paragraph, were you explain the weaknesses of the XPM or when to apply it. <br> | ||
+ | ** The limitations where kind of defined in the discussion but maybe not developed enough. I rewrote this section and I believe that now the limitations are more detailed. Good suggestion. | ||
• In general, I think it is a good idea to find some examples of XPM projects, and explain a little about one or two cases. <br> | • In general, I think it is a good idea to find some examples of XPM projects, and explain a little about one or two cases. <br> | ||
• I think it would be good to describe each of the sources with few lines, explaining about the paper and the author. <br> | • I think it would be good to describe each of the sources with few lines, explaining about the paper and the author. <br> | ||
+ | ** ✓ I forgot to annotate the bibliography like the assignment says, thank you for telling! | ||
• It is hard to distinguish between your opinion and the theory; maybe you should clarify it in the discussion section. <br><br> | • It is hard to distinguish between your opinion and the theory; maybe you should clarify it in the discussion section. <br><br> | ||
+ | ** Good point. I hope that the changes made improved this aspect. | ||
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+ | S141926. Thank you both for your constructive and clear reviews. They have been very useful to improve the article. |
Revision as of 17:31, 28 September 2015
Contents |
Review given by StephSalling, review2
Formal aspects
- The article follows the “method” structure very well.
- ✓
- There are some grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors, maybe an extra proofreading would be a good idea (maybe by someone else, it is often helpful having a second pair of eyes read it through).
- I have to say that I absolutely agree with you. After extra proofreading I made same changes that, I think, made the text more understandable and easier to follow.
- The article is written in an engaging style in terms of content, but some sentences are a bit long and hard to follow.
- Same I said above applies here :)
- The figure is very illustrative, but a reference to the source for it might be a good idea. More figures would improve the reading experience, but I do not know if it is possible to find other relevant figures.
- I drew the figure myself but I was inspired from DeCarlo's book so as you said it is a good idea to reference it. I also added a new figure to illustrate the uncertainty explained in the second section. Good suggestion.
- Very nice use of table and bullet points.
Content aspects
- I think the article is interesting for a practitioner.
- The topic is clear and specific.
- The length of the article seems appropriate.
- There is a red thread through the article, however, the transition from XPM to Rapid Methodology could be smoother.
- I don't exactly know what you mean by "red thread" but I tried to make a more smoother transition with a short introduction.
- The starting summary is sufficient and not too long.
- ✓
- Your sources seem good and of high quality. You could maybe elaborate some of them (the “annotated bibliography” part).
- ✓ I forgot to annotate the bibliography like the assignment says, thank you for telling!
- The use of the word “we” in some sentences is a bit confusing for me as it mixes up your “own opinion” with statements substantiated by literature.
- ✓ Even though I only found one "we" you are right, it sounded a little confusing so I rewrite not only this sentence but also other statements that sounded own opinion while were not. Thank you for the constructive feedback.
Reviewer 3: s141586
In general, very good article with an interesting topic and good flow, but needs improvement.
Formal:
• The article follows a clear “method” structure.
• In general, too long sentences. I have detected many grammatical errors, needs proofreading.
- As I said to the reviewer 1, I have to say that you are also absolutely right. After extra proofreading I made same changes that, I think, made the text more understandable and easy to follow. Regarding the grammatical errors, I found some misspelling and mismatching between verb and subject. Hope it looks better now.
• The use of the form “we” it does not sounds very good in an academic article, I would rather use the passive form to express the same (Overview section)
- This was also suggested for reviewer one, and I agree with you both. The sentence has been rewritten.
• Well-referenced and good use of quotes from authors.
• Some more figures would be useful
- ✓
• Well formatted. Wiki references.
Content:
• It is a very interesting topic for a practitioner, but I have the feeling that some of the statements are being repeated in too many paragraphs (specially the ones defining the XPM).
• The length seems to be ok, even that is around 2500 words. It has a good flow.
- ✓ After your suggestions some text has been added so now it is nearly 3000.
• I miss a “limitations” paragraph, were you explain the weaknesses of the XPM or when to apply it.
- The limitations where kind of defined in the discussion but maybe not developed enough. I rewrote this section and I believe that now the limitations are more detailed. Good suggestion.
• In general, I think it is a good idea to find some examples of XPM projects, and explain a little about one or two cases.
• I think it would be good to describe each of the sources with few lines, explaining about the paper and the author.
- ✓ I forgot to annotate the bibliography like the assignment says, thank you for telling!
• It is hard to distinguish between your opinion and the theory; maybe you should clarify it in the discussion section.
- Good point. I hope that the changes made improved this aspect.
S141926. Thank you both for your constructive and clear reviews. They have been very useful to improve the article.