Talk:Work Breakdown Structure (WBS)
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* Another positive aspect is that it follows the method structure. | * Another positive aspect is that it follows the method structure. | ||
* In addition, it has a good structure of sections and you did a good job with the references. | * In addition, it has a good structure of sections and you did a good job with the references. | ||
| + | ''Thanks for the all positive comments'' | ||
* I would suggest to separate the text into more paragraphs, especially in sections like ''History'' and ''Value breakdown structure''. This way, you could improve the reading flow. | * I would suggest to separate the text into more paragraphs, especially in sections like ''History'' and ''Value breakdown structure''. This way, you could improve the reading flow. | ||
| + | I tried as you suggested to improve the reading flow as you suggested. specially by concentrating on punctuation. | ||
* Also, I recommend you to be careful with “,” and “.”. You should separate some sentences, for example: | * Also, I recommend you to be careful with “,” and “.”. You should separate some sentences, for example: | ||
** ''Moreover, during the project executions the percentage of steps completed must be included. This ensure better control and guidance in case of any changes during the project development''. | ** ''Moreover, during the project executions the percentage of steps completed must be included. This ensure better control and guidance in case of any changes during the project development''. | ||
| − | ** ''During 1962, United State Airforce released “STUDY OF METHODS FOR EVALUATION OF THE PERT/COST MANAGEMENT SYSTEM”. In this document WBS was mention as a useful tool for controlling and planning large acquisition projects''. | + | ** ''During 1962, United State Airforce released “STUDY OF METHODS FOR EVALUATION OF THE PERT/COST MANAGEMENT SYSTEM”. In this document WBS was mention as a useful tool for controlling and planning large acquisition projects''. |
| + | ''Did it.'' | ||
** ''WBS could be considered a general tool that can be use in most of projects and program, due to this reason a WBS to another may vary to best adapts the project manager needs''. | ** ''WBS could be considered a general tool that can be use in most of projects and program, due to this reason a WBS to another may vary to best adapts the project manager needs''. | ||
* Also, you should revise the grammar carefully. For example: | * Also, you should revise the grammar carefully. For example: | ||
** must includes = must include | ** must includes = must include | ||
| − | ** since this tool is use = since this tool is used | + | ** since this tool is use = since this tool is used |
| + | ''Did it.'' | ||
* I would suggest that you transform the questions in the ''Main characteristics'' section into indirect questions. | * I would suggest that you transform the questions in the ''Main characteristics'' section into indirect questions. | ||
* In addition, be careful with the paragraph spacing. | * In addition, be careful with the paragraph spacing. | ||
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* I think you should use “:” after ''Nothing extra'' and ''Nothing Missing''. | * I think you should use “:” after ''Nothing extra'' and ''Nothing Missing''. | ||
* Finally, correct the spelling of the words ''advantages'' and ''disadvantages'' in the last section title. | * Finally, correct the spelling of the words ''advantages'' and ''disadvantages'' in the last section title. | ||
| + | ''Did it.'' | ||
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| + | ''I really appreciate your suggestion. You have been really precise and you gave me the exact location of some errors.'' | ||
<u>Reviewer 2: S102935</u> | <u>Reviewer 2: S102935</u> | ||
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## Good references | ## Good references | ||
## I can see you intend to Include more figures and pictures to illustrate some of the main points of the article, which is good | ## I can see you intend to Include more figures and pictures to illustrate some of the main points of the article, which is good | ||
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| + | ''Now all the pictures are uploaded'' | ||
# '''Missing content and formalities''' | # '''Missing content and formalities''' | ||
## The annotated bibliography seem like an important part of the article, so remember to include annotations in your final article. | ## The annotated bibliography seem like an important part of the article, so remember to include annotations in your final article. | ||
| + | ''I do not get exactly what do you mean.'' | ||
## A few grammatical errors, which unfortunately makes the article difficult to understand. These should be thinned out before the final hand-in, such as missing words and punctuation. | ## A few grammatical errors, which unfortunately makes the article difficult to understand. These should be thinned out before the final hand-in, such as missing words and punctuation. | ||
| + | ''Both grammar and punctuation errors have been fixed.'' | ||
# '''Suggestions''' | # '''Suggestions''' | ||
## Try to link your subject to other articles, where work break down structure is used, such as scheduling, time and cost estimation etc. | ## Try to link your subject to other articles, where work break down structure is used, such as scheduling, time and cost estimation etc. | ||
## Remember to focus on keeping a logical flow between the chapters, so one part leads to the next. | ## Remember to focus on keeping a logical flow between the chapters, so one part leads to the next. | ||
| − | ## Reread your article to thin out grammatical errors. | + | ## Reread your article to thin out grammatical errors.''Did It'' |
## Remember to include the figures and mention them in the text with their associated number | ## Remember to include the figures and mention them in the text with their associated number | ||
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'''Reviewer 3: AndreasAndersen''' | '''Reviewer 3: AndreasAndersen''' | ||
* The introduction to the topic is really good | * The introduction to the topic is really good | ||
| − | * The language and grammar of the article are fine but with some formulation mistakes. You have to read the article a few more times to correct the last of the grammar. For example ” no matter is the scope project, program or portfolio” | + | * The language and grammar of the article are fine but with some formulation mistakes. You have to read the article a few more times to correct the last of the grammar. For example ” no matter is the scope project, program or portfolio” |
| − | * Remember to put pictures that you mention into the article. That would make the article more reader-friendly | + | ''Thanks, I hope that now the article is more readable'' |
| − | * I think that the history section is | + | * There is a very good flow of the article and the different sections are linked |
| − | * | + | * Remember to put pictures that you mention into the article. That would make the article more reader-friendly |
| − | * It is important that there are no errors in your headlines. There are for example spelling errors in the headline ”Potential misunderstand, Disadventage and adventage” | + | ''Pictures added'' |
| − | * You need to link your Wiki article to other APPPM Wiki | + | ''* I think that the history section is too long. Maybe you could write the same information with fewer sentences |
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| + | ''Honestly I think that the length of history is fine'' | ||
| + | * Remember to describe the concepts or information to the reader. For example in the ”Work Breakdown Structure main Characteristics” are you talking about lower levels, level 6 etc. I cant find any description of these levels and therefore i think that the different states of levels has to be introduced | ||
| + | * It is important that there are no spelling errors in your headlines. There are for example spelling errors in the headline ”Potential misunderstand, Disadventage and adventage” | ||
| + | * You need to link your Wiki article to other relevant pages in the APPPM Wiki | ||
* The article meets the requirement of the 3000 words | * The article meets the requirement of the 3000 words | ||
* It is good that you have different types of references | * It is good that you have different types of references | ||
Latest revision as of 23:53, 28 September 2015
Mette: I like your idea for a topic. I seems like you have a clear idea of what to write the article about and have remembered the structure for a "method article". Maybe you could short mention the Goal Breakdown Structure (GBS) in the article and outline the different.
Reviewer 1: s142581
- The topic was a wise choice, very relevant for practitioners and related to the course.
- Another positive aspect is that it follows the method structure.
- In addition, it has a good structure of sections and you did a good job with the references.
Thanks for the all positive comments
- I would suggest to separate the text into more paragraphs, especially in sections like History and Value breakdown structure. This way, you could improve the reading flow.
I tried as you suggested to improve the reading flow as you suggested. specially by concentrating on punctuation.
- Also, I recommend you to be careful with “,” and “.”. You should separate some sentences, for example:
- Moreover, during the project executions the percentage of steps completed must be included. This ensure better control and guidance in case of any changes during the project development.
- During 1962, United State Airforce released “STUDY OF METHODS FOR EVALUATION OF THE PERT/COST MANAGEMENT SYSTEM”. In this document WBS was mention as a useful tool for controlling and planning large acquisition projects.
Did it.
- WBS could be considered a general tool that can be use in most of projects and program, due to this reason a WBS to another may vary to best adapts the project manager needs.
- Also, you should revise the grammar carefully. For example:
- must includes = must include
- since this tool is use = since this tool is used
Did it.
- I would suggest that you transform the questions in the Main characteristics section into indirect questions.
- In addition, be careful with the paragraph spacing.
- You should introduce with a sentence the bullet points at the end of the Main characteristics section.
- I think you should rephrase the sentence “The most common method for decomposing a WBS are the following methods”. In addition, I recommend that you continue the explanation to every concept in the same line.
- Although you have noted “Picture under construction”, do not forget to numerate them and align them properly in the text. I would also suggest that you mention the figures in the text.
- I think you should use “:” after Nothing extra and Nothing Missing.
- Finally, correct the spelling of the words advantages and disadvantages in the last section title.
Did it.
I really appreciate your suggestion. You have been really precise and you gave me the exact location of some errors.
Reviewer 2: S102935
- Pros
- Highly relevant topic
- Follows the outlines for the course neatly
- Good overall structure of the article
- Good references
- I can see you intend to Include more figures and pictures to illustrate some of the main points of the article, which is good
Now all the pictures are uploaded
- Missing content and formalities
- The annotated bibliography seem like an important part of the article, so remember to include annotations in your final article.
I do not get exactly what do you mean.
- A few grammatical errors, which unfortunately makes the article difficult to understand. These should be thinned out before the final hand-in, such as missing words and punctuation.
Both grammar and punctuation errors have been fixed.
- Suggestions
- Try to link your subject to other articles, where work break down structure is used, such as scheduling, time and cost estimation etc.
- Remember to focus on keeping a logical flow between the chapters, so one part leads to the next.
- Reread your article to thin out grammatical errors.Did It
- Remember to include the figures and mention them in the text with their associated number
Reviewer 3: AndreasAndersen
- The introduction to the topic is really good
- The language and grammar of the article are fine but with some formulation mistakes. You have to read the article a few more times to correct the last of the grammar. For example ” no matter is the scope project, program or portfolio”
Thanks, I hope that now the article is more readable
- There is a very good flow of the article and the different sections are linked
- Remember to put pictures that you mention into the article. That would make the article more reader-friendly
Pictures added * I think that the history section is too long. Maybe you could write the same information with fewer sentences
Honestly I think that the length of history is fine
- Remember to describe the concepts or information to the reader. For example in the ”Work Breakdown Structure main Characteristics” are you talking about lower levels, level 6 etc. I cant find any description of these levels and therefore i think that the different states of levels has to be introduced
- It is important that there are no spelling errors in your headlines. There are for example spelling errors in the headline ”Potential misunderstand, Disadventage and adventage”
- You need to link your Wiki article to other relevant pages in the APPPM Wiki
- The article meets the requirement of the 3000 words
- It is good that you have different types of references
