Talk:Lean Tools in Project Management
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Reviewer 2: Alise | Reviewer 2: Alise | ||
| − | * Nicely structured. It is clean and has a good overview. | + | * Nicely structured. It is clean and has a good overview. (Thanks) |
| − | * There are some sentences that can be written better. F. Ex. “but during the past years have lean been established….” Which would be better when written like this “but during the past years lean has been established… “ | + | * There are some sentences that can be written better. F. Ex. “but during the past years have lean been established….” Which would be better when written like this “but during the past years lean has been established… “ |
| − | * You should not write that something is impossible. If it is a process for something to be done, it does not encourage anyone when they read the word “impossible”. (Seek perfection) | + | * You should not write that something is impossible. If it is a process for something to be done, it does not encourage anyone when they read the word “impossible”. (Seek perfection) (tried to make it clear) |
* When writing about “From Lean to Lean Project Management”, the first sentence does not make much sense. What are you writing a brief summary about? Also, a summary would be more than four bullet points. It would explain something, either what you will write about or what you have written about. | * When writing about “From Lean to Lean Project Management”, the first sentence does not make much sense. What are you writing a brief summary about? Also, a summary would be more than four bullet points. It would explain something, either what you will write about or what you have written about. | ||
* The definition of project management should be all the way at the top. People need to know what they are reading about. Also, make it clear what the definition actually is, and where it ends. Maybe start the next sentence as a new paragraph. | * The definition of project management should be all the way at the top. People need to know what they are reading about. Also, make it clear what the definition actually is, and where it ends. Maybe start the next sentence as a new paragraph. | ||
| − | * “The 8 different relates to production” – 8 what? | + | * “The 8 different relates to production” – 8 what? (Forgot a word) |
* I don’t think you should use questions in the article. | * I don’t think you should use questions in the article. | ||
| − | * What is an A3 tool? A description of this would be good if it is a lean tool. | + | * What is an A3 tool? A description of this would be good if it is a lean tool. (I deleted that) |
* Some pictures of the different tools would be nice. | * Some pictures of the different tools would be nice. | ||
| − | * What is a leader imagination? (The Gemba Walk) | + | * What is a leader imagination? (The Gemba Walk) (Changed this) |
* Some of the examples you have used are a little too specific. | * Some of the examples you have used are a little too specific. | ||
| − | * See difference; effect vs. affect. | + | * See difference; effect vs. affect. (?) |
| − | * Remember references! | + | * You are not close to the 3000 word count yet, but keep working! |
| + | * Remember references! (I know, I mentioned that in the beginning of the article?) | ||
* The article needs some more work, and be aware of grammar and structure of sentences. Try not to use very long sentences as it makes it difficult to read. | * The article needs some more work, and be aware of grammar and structure of sentences. Try not to use very long sentences as it makes it difficult to read. | ||
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| + | Wiki feedbacks from s142823 | ||
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| + | * Words missing to complete a sentence in the abstract : “The crucial for a p…” (yes, i know) | ||
| + | * Good structure | ||
| + | * Very good brief introduction to Lean, clear and easy to understand | ||
| + | * Add a link when you quote the “8 wastes” (yes) | ||
| + | * About the A3 tool, it may be good to add a link to one of the article from Fall 2014 | ||
| + | * Some grammatical mistakes, for example “methodology” instead of “mythology” (I have changed that) | ||
| + | * Don’t forget to fill the missing parts | ||
| + | * Apparently there is still somework to do on it, good luck, you started it well (thanks) | ||
| + | * Very interesting topic, it seems well documented | ||
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| + | '''Reviewer 3, s141530''': | ||
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| + | *At the first sight what is missing are the references, for a technical article like this one is important to provide the appropriate references. This allowed the reader to have a prove of what you are stating. Moreover, references give the chance to students to read more about of the topic which he/she is interested on. (Mentioned in the beginning, that i did not add any references at that time) | ||
| + | *From my perspective the link between Lean to Lean Project Management it is not so clear. Instead of Writing “..The definition of project management: Project management is the application of processes, methods, knowledge, skills and experience to achieve the project objectives. The 8 different relates mainly to the production, not specific, there are some similar kind of waste in project management.” I suggest to take inspiration from the five main principles of Lean Project Management here is a valuable reference that talks about that“Ronald Mascitelli, (2002) ‘Building a Project-Driven Enterprise: How to Slash Waste and Boost Profits Though Lean Project Management Institute'.” | ||
| + | *Lean Tools in Project Management section: | ||
| + | In this section each tool Is well developed. However, do the fact that this part is the core of the article I suggest to provide more information regarding limitations and Field of application and example in Project Management. During the explanation of Kaizen tool, please add information about “kaizen event” because same reader may do not know this term. (have done) | ||
| + | * I suggest also to add pictures for each tool. (Thanks, but I thought it was not necessary to add it for all of them) | ||
| + | *Moreover “…The 8 different relates..” I can not understand to what is related with. | ||
| + | *Unfortunately in this draft are missing many article sections (Example of Value Stream Mapping, Six Sigma, Figures Discussion Reference) that my peer review is not able to analyze. | ||
| + | *However the main structure is clear, I am looking forward to read you final article ;) | ||
Latest revision as of 14:18, 29 September 2015
Mette: I like the idea and the topic you have chosen. Lean contains many tools, so you could maybe consider if you should focus on only one tool in case of not getting your hands too full. Your article may end up a bit generic, and not as interesting as it could be because it is too broad. So think about tool for risk management and then pick one you can really go into details with.
Reviewer 2: Alise
- Nicely structured. It is clean and has a good overview. (Thanks)
- There are some sentences that can be written better. F. Ex. “but during the past years have lean been established….” Which would be better when written like this “but during the past years lean has been established… “
- You should not write that something is impossible. If it is a process for something to be done, it does not encourage anyone when they read the word “impossible”. (Seek perfection) (tried to make it clear)
- When writing about “From Lean to Lean Project Management”, the first sentence does not make much sense. What are you writing a brief summary about? Also, a summary would be more than four bullet points. It would explain something, either what you will write about or what you have written about.
- The definition of project management should be all the way at the top. People need to know what they are reading about. Also, make it clear what the definition actually is, and where it ends. Maybe start the next sentence as a new paragraph.
- “The 8 different relates to production” – 8 what? (Forgot a word)
- I don’t think you should use questions in the article.
- What is an A3 tool? A description of this would be good if it is a lean tool. (I deleted that)
- Some pictures of the different tools would be nice.
- What is a leader imagination? (The Gemba Walk) (Changed this)
- Some of the examples you have used are a little too specific.
- See difference; effect vs. affect. (?)
- You are not close to the 3000 word count yet, but keep working!
- Remember references! (I know, I mentioned that in the beginning of the article?)
- The article needs some more work, and be aware of grammar and structure of sentences. Try not to use very long sentences as it makes it difficult to read.
Wiki feedbacks from s142823
- Words missing to complete a sentence in the abstract : “The crucial for a p…” (yes, i know)
- Good structure
- Very good brief introduction to Lean, clear and easy to understand
- Add a link when you quote the “8 wastes” (yes)
- About the A3 tool, it may be good to add a link to one of the article from Fall 2014
- Some grammatical mistakes, for example “methodology” instead of “mythology” (I have changed that)
- Don’t forget to fill the missing parts
- Apparently there is still somework to do on it, good luck, you started it well (thanks)
- Very interesting topic, it seems well documented
Reviewer 3, s141530:
- At the first sight what is missing are the references, for a technical article like this one is important to provide the appropriate references. This allowed the reader to have a prove of what you are stating. Moreover, references give the chance to students to read more about of the topic which he/she is interested on. (Mentioned in the beginning, that i did not add any references at that time)
- From my perspective the link between Lean to Lean Project Management it is not so clear. Instead of Writing “..The definition of project management: Project management is the application of processes, methods, knowledge, skills and experience to achieve the project objectives. The 8 different relates mainly to the production, not specific, there are some similar kind of waste in project management.” I suggest to take inspiration from the five main principles of Lean Project Management here is a valuable reference that talks about that“Ronald Mascitelli, (2002) ‘Building a Project-Driven Enterprise: How to Slash Waste and Boost Profits Though Lean Project Management Institute'.”
- Lean Tools in Project Management section:
In this section each tool Is well developed. However, do the fact that this part is the core of the article I suggest to provide more information regarding limitations and Field of application and example in Project Management. During the explanation of Kaizen tool, please add information about “kaizen event” because same reader may do not know this term. (have done)
- I suggest also to add pictures for each tool. (Thanks, but I thought it was not necessary to add it for all of them)
- Moreover “…The 8 different relates..” I can not understand to what is related with.
- Unfortunately in this draft are missing many article sections (Example of Value Stream Mapping, Six Sigma, Figures Discussion Reference) that my peer review is not able to analyze.
- However the main structure is clear, I am looking forward to read you final article ;)
