Talk:Implementing KPIs
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+ | I was happy to learn more about the implementation of KPIs and some software related. It is an interesting article. | ||
+ | Your cross-references are very detailed and you do not forget to categorize your article. | ||
+ | The use of some concrete examples (introduction, additional related material) make it more pleasant to read. | ||
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+ | However : | ||
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+ | - I would add an abstract (summary) to help the help the reader quickly determine the article´s purpose. | ||
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+ | - Comparing the standards, you could add sone more sentences about each of them. For example mention that PMI is an American Standard, IPMA is a European one, Prince 2 is from the UK and ISO is international. | ||
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+ | - I find the paragraph about Scorecards/Dashboards interesting, but not detailed enough. For example, a concrete example would make it more relevant. | ||
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+ | - You could draw a table to summarize the strengths and weaknesses at the end of the paragraph Strength and Weaknesses. | ||
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+ | - It would be great if you could add some pictures, for example a picture showing the results that can be obtained using Single KPIs/Klipfolio. | ||
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+ | - It could be nice to provide concrete example of companies/projects using theses softwares. | ||
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+ | - I would add a conclusion. | ||
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+ | - I think there are some grammatical mistakes. Here are some corrections: | ||
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+ | '''INTRODUCTION''' : | ||
+ | -''No matter, whether you have a small one man business or '''is (are?)''' the director for a large corporation, whether you manage a project, a portfolio or are just '''trying (are trying/try?)''' to get a small task like making a grocery list and getting the shopping done in time, the knowledge of whether you are on the right track and on time can prove crucial.” | ||
+ | - for some reasoning : Do you mean “for some reasons”'' ? | ||
+ | - "''more or less none of the chief executives''” Do you mean ”almost none” ? | ||
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+ | '''COMPARABLE STANDARDS''': | ||
+ | - “T''he ISO 21500 standard [2] has most of it focus toward''''s''” : I would say ”The he ISO 21500 standard [2] is mostly focused towards” | ||
+ | - “''but it IS WITH an overall APPROACH, and not very specific''.” | ||
+ | - “T''he Prince 2 standards [4], gets yet TO a level higher''” Is it singular or plural ? The same remains for “These includes” : This includes ? | ||
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+ | '''ADDITIONAL RELATED MATERIAL''': | ||
+ | -“T''he executive management does not have a need for information regarding the day to day performance. They need a larger scale…''” In the first sentence you use a singular and a plural in the second one. I think it would be better to choose either for singular or plural in both sentences. | ||
+ | - “''3 month'''S''' or 6 month''S''''” | ||
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+ | '''HOW TO DEFINE KPIs''': | ||
+ | -“''First of all, as explained elsewhere,''” You should maybe precise where/in which part of the article. For example, say, “as explained in the previous paragraph”. | ||
+ | -“ ''having the grand overview,''” I would say large/broad overview | ||
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+ | '''DISCUSSION''': | ||
+ | - “''Strength and Weakness'': I would either use a plural or singular, but the same for both of them. | ||
+ | - “if the KPIs implemented are not performing properly, are not properly defined or haVE some defects.” Use a synonymous for properly : correctly/adequately | ||
+ | - “''management run'''S''' the risk''” | ||
+ | - Avoid repetition of run the risk : take the chance ? | ||
+ | - “A list OF a few examples” | ||
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+ | - I think there are some typing errors: | ||
+ | “''KPIs had a quick revival when the'''Y''' hit the management market back'' ” | ||
+ | “''Monitoring and Controlling Process Group or project work''” I would only use capital letters for the word Monitoring since you do not use any for project work. | ||
+ | “''on a very high, general, level''” There are too many commas. | ||
+ | “''The task pf comparing performance''” : OF | ||
+ | -“''bypically''” : Typically | ||
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+ | - Some sentences are a too long according to me, especially in the introduction. I would split some of them to make the reading easier. | ||
+ | For example: | ||
+ | “If you are a single person, doing a simple task, odds are, that you are at least somewhat aware of the progress. But if you are a manager, with multiple persons working with you towards a common goal, perhaps even trying to juggle multiple projects within a portfolio, it can quickly prove more difficult to maintain the overview of the combined work progress.” | ||
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+ | Good luck |
Revision as of 18:58, 25 November 2014
Feedback - Char
FORMAL ASPECTS
- Good critical approach
- Nice language
- Good and clear structure
- Code the references.
- The length is good. You cover the chosen subject.
CONTENT ASPECTS Introduction
- The introduction is very catchy
So, what does the literature say Comparable standards
- You could add a more history view on the KPI in order to create and understanding of he term. When where the term used first, develop etc.
- You could create a table with the different standards, their description, KIPs and diversity. This will create a overview of the different standards and make it easier for the reader to compare them.
Additional related material
- Look at CMMI (Capability Maturity Model Integration). This is a process that determines/viewer (by some kind of measurement) maturity of different processes and thereby show where there need to be improved
The setup How to define KPIs
- Very good discussion about the number of measurements.
Scorecards and Dashboards
- Add figure of the Scorecards and Dashboards
- Explain what parameters the two setups are containing in order to create overview and how they are using the information and data.
- You could expand your description about the differences between the scorecards and dashboards. The whole section is a bit short.
Discussion Strength and weaknesses
- Good discussion. You are covering many different perspectives.
Implementation advice
- The examples create a good overview and understanding.
Feedbacks provided by Lyngby :
I was happy to learn more about the implementation of KPIs and some software related. It is an interesting article. Your cross-references are very detailed and you do not forget to categorize your article. The use of some concrete examples (introduction, additional related material) make it more pleasant to read.
However :
- I would add an abstract (summary) to help the help the reader quickly determine the article´s purpose.
- Comparing the standards, you could add sone more sentences about each of them. For example mention that PMI is an American Standard, IPMA is a European one, Prince 2 is from the UK and ISO is international.
- I find the paragraph about Scorecards/Dashboards interesting, but not detailed enough. For example, a concrete example would make it more relevant.
- You could draw a table to summarize the strengths and weaknesses at the end of the paragraph Strength and Weaknesses.
- It would be great if you could add some pictures, for example a picture showing the results that can be obtained using Single KPIs/Klipfolio.
- It could be nice to provide concrete example of companies/projects using theses softwares.
- I would add a conclusion.
- I think there are some grammatical mistakes. Here are some corrections:
INTRODUCTION : -No matter, whether you have a small one man business or is (are?) the director for a large corporation, whether you manage a project, a portfolio or are just trying (are trying/try?) to get a small task like making a grocery list and getting the shopping done in time, the knowledge of whether you are on the right track and on time can prove crucial.” - for some reasoning : Do you mean “for some reasons” ? - "more or less none of the chief executives” Do you mean ”almost none” ?
COMPARABLE STANDARDS:
- “The ISO 21500 standard [2] has most of it focus toward's” : I would say ”The he ISO 21500 standard [2] is mostly focused towards”
- “but it IS WITH an overall APPROACH, and not very specific.”
- “The Prince 2 standards [4], gets yet TO a level higher” Is it singular or plural ? The same remains for “These includes” : This includes ?
ADDITIONAL RELATED MATERIAL:
-“The executive management does not have a need for information regarding the day to day performance. They need a larger scale…” In the first sentence you use a singular and a plural in the second one. I think it would be better to choose either for singular or plural in both sentences.
- “3 monthS or 6 monthS'”
HOW TO DEFINE KPIs:
-“First of all, as explained elsewhere,” You should maybe precise where/in which part of the article. For example, say, “as explained in the previous paragraph”.
-“ having the grand overview,” I would say large/broad overview
DISCUSSION:
- “Strength and Weakness: I would either use a plural or singular, but the same for both of them.
- “if the KPIs implemented are not performing properly, are not properly defined or haVE some defects.” Use a synonymous for properly : correctly/adequately
- “management runS the risk”
- Avoid repetition of run the risk : take the chance ?
- “A list OF a few examples”
- I think there are some typing errors:
“KPIs had a quick revival when theY hit the management market back ”
“Monitoring and Controlling Process Group or project work” I would only use capital letters for the word Monitoring since you do not use any for project work.
“on a very high, general, level” There are too many commas.
“The task pf comparing performance” : OF
-“bypically” : Typically
- Some sentences are a too long according to me, especially in the introduction. I would split some of them to make the reading easier.
For example:
“If you are a single person, doing a simple task, odds are, that you are at least somewhat aware of the progress. But if you are a manager, with multiple persons working with you towards a common goal, perhaps even trying to juggle multiple projects within a portfolio, it can quickly prove more difficult to maintain the overview of the combined work progress.”
Good luck