Talk:Critical reflection on Project Portfolio Management software
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| − | Thank you for your article | + | Thank you for your article. It was interesting to read and see a critical reflection on PPM Software and on the same hand to get more comprehensive understanding regarding the PPM Software processes. |
| + | There are few thoughts and insights about it that I would like to share with you. | ||
===Formal aspects=== | ===Formal aspects=== | ||
| + | *Since it is a WIKI article, I am not sure if there should be a paragraph called "Abstract". Maybe it would be more appropriate way to put it in ahead of the content box? | ||
| + | *Sometimes composition of sentences makes it hard to understand, and in some cases it looks like missing punctuation what makes difficult to follow the idea. | ||
| + | *At one place you use expression "is they", should it be "are"? | ||
| + | *Regarding the figures, what do they reflect upon? Do they really make sense in this context? | ||
| − | + | ===Content aspects=== | |
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Revision as of 01:29, 26 November 2014
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Val review
I would like to start saying that I learnt something reading your article, which is a good point. The structure is logical and you manage to turn the complexity of your topic into an easy reading article. I divided my feedback in 3 categories that are the following:
Formal aspects
- You should try to introduce the wiki format for references [1] You can also have a look to other articles who use it
- figure 1 is missing
- It is hard to see the legend/caption in figure 2. You can add a caption using Wiki formatting.
- "Executives" or "executives? I think you should choose one of the writing and use the same for the whole article
Grammar and Spelling
Few errors here. To find them, use the research tool.
- deferral instead of deferal
- "As Lee Merkhofer consulting states. It is not beneficial for software developers to make advanced PPM software targeting niche markets."?
- "The bottom line is that even though PPM decision making software is adapted by many companies it fail"s" to gain user acceptance."
Content aspects
- Your article is mostly didactic but sometimes you take strong positions like in this sentence: "Even though Cooper R. argues that poor tools are better than no tools I would argue that a tool that distorts the result is worse." Maybe you should stay pedagogic.
- "From 1990 - 1999 IT investments rose from 9% - 22%" => % of what?
- Your article misses maybe a conclusion?
Peer review by Qwerty
Thank you for your article. It was interesting to read and see a critical reflection on PPM Software and on the same hand to get more comprehensive understanding regarding the PPM Software processes. There are few thoughts and insights about it that I would like to share with you.
Formal aspects
- Since it is a WIKI article, I am not sure if there should be a paragraph called "Abstract". Maybe it would be more appropriate way to put it in ahead of the content box?
- Sometimes composition of sentences makes it hard to understand, and in some cases it looks like missing punctuation what makes difficult to follow the idea.
- At one place you use expression "is they", should it be "are"?
- Regarding the figures, what do they reflect upon? Do they really make sense in this context?
