Talk:Project Initiation Management in construction
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1. It seems a good article for someone to get to know what the term 'Project Initiation' is about | 1. It seems a good article for someone to get to know what the term 'Project Initiation' is about | ||
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2. I cannot see any particularly highlighted management tips or advice in the article, despite the word management in the title | 2. I cannot see any particularly highlighted management tips or advice in the article, despite the word management in the title | ||
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3. (After carefully reading the whole article) I cannot readily see how someone from the construction industry can pick up this article, read it and then go 'OK, so I need to do this (whatever thing) whereby I get this (a given) benefit'. '' | 3. (After carefully reading the whole article) I cannot readily see how someone from the construction industry can pick up this article, read it and then go 'OK, so I need to do this (whatever thing) whereby I get this (a given) benefit'. '' | ||
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Revision as of 19:08, 25 February 2019
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Feedback 1 | Reviewer name: Martin Kirk
Question 1 · TEXT
Quality of the summary:
Does the summary make the key focus, insights and/or contribution of the article clear?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 1
The abstract successfully mentions the overall topic and describes most of the sub-topics / points made in the article. A key improvement could be to very clearly mention which headline insight (one thing) the article seeks to bring. Think: what problem does this article try to solve?
Question 2 · TEXT
Structure and logic of the article:
Is the argument clear?
Is there a logical flow to the article?
Does one part build upon the other?
Is the article consistent in its argument and free of contradictions?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 2
Individual arguments are somewhat clear. However, the high overall number of arguments clouds the article focus. This unfortunately also means that there is no flow in which sections build on top of each other to finish with one accumulated key point. Instead it feels like an increasingly growing snowball of terms, the size of which made me as a reader fear the overall topic in sheer overwhelmingness.
The article is however consistent and there are no contradictions.
Suggested improvements would be: - Organisation of points: try to organise the points you wish to make in a way that gives the user a complete overview of all of them in one place, e.g. a list. - Reduction of points: With the current amount of points, it is 98% gathering of other people's work and only a 2% hint of the insight you personally wish to bring in the article - Following through the article red thread: the headline suggests you want to educate the construction industry on the topic, and your abstract also says this, but where is this insight at the end of the article? Maybe you have not yet had time to write the conclusion in this first draft?
Question 3 · TEXT
Grammar and style:
Is the writing free of grammatical and spelling errors?
Is the language precise without unnecessary fill words?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 3
The article needs proofreading throughout. I found in the region of 30-40 grammatical/spelling errors. The language used is generally very good - great job! A couple of places sentences could be cut in two, but that's all! :) Apart from a thorough grammar check, your language needs no further work. Spend your time on the other points mentioned instead.
Question 4 · TEXT
Figures and tables:
Are figures and tables clear?
Do they summarize the key points of the article in a meaningful way?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 4
Figures and tables are generally very good. I must admit I don't quite understand the first one (influence-expenditure), so perhaps just clarify this graph so that more people (e.g. a child or me) can understand it! :)
Question 5 · TEXT
Interest and relevance:
Is the article of high practical and / or academic relevance?
Is it made clear in the article why / how it is relevant?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 5
The article does a good job at describing, referencing literature and giving an overall topical insight. However, I don't feel it is very practically useable in its current format. Three things strike me as confusing given the article title/heading:
1. It seems a good article for someone to get to know what the term 'Project Initiation' is about
2. I cannot see any particularly highlighted management tips or advice in the article, despite the word management in the title
3. (After carefully reading the whole article) I cannot readily see how someone from the construction industry can pick up this article, read it and then go 'OK, so I need to do this (whatever thing) whereby I get this (a given) benefit'.
Question 6 · TEXT
Depth of treatment:
Is the article interesting for a practitioner or academic to read?
Does it make a significant contribution beyond a cursory web search?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 6
I think currently it makes an interesting read for academics, or perhaps junior industry employees, moreso than more experienced practitioners.
I definitely feel like it has advantages over a standard web search, as it gathers a lot of useful references in one place.
I would make the article more practically useable.
Question 7 · TEXT
Annotated bibliography:
Does the article properly cite and acknowledge previous work?
Does it briefly summarize the key references at the end of the article?
Is it based on empirical data instead of opinion?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 7
References and citations are very good and thorough.
Empirical foundations ensure that text is not opinionated.
No improvements necessary here. Good job! :)
Feedback 2 | Reviewer name: write your name here
Question 1 · TEXT
Quality of the summary:
Does the summary make the key focus, insights and/or contribution of the article clear?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 1
Answer here
Question 2 · TEXT
Structure and logic of the article:
Is the argument clear?
Is there a logical flow to the article?
Does one part build upon the other?
Is the article consistent in its argument and free of contradictions?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 2
Answer here
Question 3 · TEXT
Grammar and style:
Is the writing free of grammatical and spelling errors?
Is the language precise without unnecessary fill words?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 3
Answer here
Question 4 · TEXT
Figures and tables:
Are figures and tables clear?
Do they summarize the key points of the article in a meaningful way?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 4
Answer here
Question 5 · TEXT
Interest and relevance:
Is the article of high practical and / or academic relevance?
Is it made clear in the article why / how it is relevant?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 5
Answer here
Question 6 · TEXT
Depth of treatment:
Is the article interesting for a practitioner or academic to read?
Does it make a significant contribution beyond a cursory web search?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 6
Answer here
Question 7 · TEXT
Annotated bibliography:
Does the article properly cite and acknowledge previous work?
Does it briefly summarize the key references at the end of the article?
Is it based on empirical data instead of opinion?
What would you suggest to improve?
Answer 7
Answer here
