Talk:Project Execution Model (PEM)
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*Describes an interesting method developed by Novo Nordisk, a nice blend between case study and method description | *Describes an interesting method developed by Novo Nordisk, a nice blend between case study and method description | ||
| − | *Minor English mistakes, that can be corrected through second time | + | *Minor English mistakes, that can be corrected through second time readind = ''Done'' |
*Good presentation of the topics, however some minor grammar mistakes make it a little more difficult to be read | *Good presentation of the topics, however some minor grammar mistakes make it a little more difficult to be read | ||
| − | *Nice figures, but missing captions and misplacement could provide a better outlook. | + | *Nice figures, but missing captions and misplacement could provide a better outlook. = ''Adjustet'' |
| − | *Main points are clear but not extensively described, in order the reader to get a better understanding of the topic. | + | *Main points are clear but not extensively described, in order the reader to get a better understanding of the topic.= ''I have try to write it more undertandeble'' |
| − | *No figure reference | + | *No figure reference = ''Added'' |
| − | *More effort in inter-wiki links and hyperlinks in the text should be done | + | *More effort in inter-wiki links and hyperlinks in the text should be done = ''Done' |
| − | *Better matrix of plan communication of stakeholders | + | *Better matrix of plan communication of stakeholders = ''Deleted'' |
| − | *Missing references and bibliography | + | *Missing references and bibliography = ''Added'' |
*Interesting subject with various aspects | *Interesting subject with various aspects | ||
| − | *Length of the article is small, as probably it is unfinished, but there is a clear enthusiasm on that subject | + | *Length of the article is small, as probably it is unfinished, but there is a clear enthusiasm on that subject = ''Was at the time unfinnished, and there are added a lot of extra :)'' |
*Phases makes a concrete structure of the article but the sections should be better presented in the table of contents. | *Phases makes a concrete structure of the article but the sections should be better presented in the table of contents. | ||
| − | *It would be nice to see implementations on other business, as well as the pros and cons of this method | + | *It would be nice to see implementations on other business, as well as the pros and cons of this method = ''Done'' |
*All in all, a nice subject that needs more effort in order to be useful and be connected with subjects such as Project Evaluation and Selection for the Formation of the Optimal Portfolio | *All in all, a nice subject that needs more effort in order to be useful and be connected with subjects such as Project Evaluation and Selection for the Formation of the Optimal Portfolio | ||
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| + | == Reviewer 2 - s141938 == | ||
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| + | * clear and concise => easy to read | ||
| + | * ideas presented in bullet points. Good idea | ||
| + | * Structure of a method visible | ||
| + | * planned links to other wiki pages. Great idea ! | ||
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| + | * Remember to add captions and figure numbering = ''Done'' | ||
| + | * Write an abstract at the beginning and make a first section with quick explanation with the current intro => nicer layout and will remove the image from the introduction ) = ''Very useful comment, and I have use a lot of time to make a better intro. Although i keept the picture in the beginning, because i think it make a good overview of the model, however I have make it a lot smaller.'' | ||
| + | * In the new first section give a brief description of the phases so that I have a small overview of the whole thing = ''Very useful, and have use a lot of time to make a better intro'' | ||
| + | * no need of making sections in phase 2, unless it will be elaborated = ''changes'' | ||
| + | * This is it for now. I’ll give you more details once finished | ||
== Reviewer 3 - Biankajuh == | == Reviewer 3 - Biankajuh == | ||
# I have find the abstract of your article very well-designed which fulfill the role of introducing the main purpose and highlights of the article including a brief introduction to the PEM model. I really like the fact that you have chosen such a real life method as the PEM model used by Novo Nordisk. | # I have find the abstract of your article very well-designed which fulfill the role of introducing the main purpose and highlights of the article including a brief introduction to the PEM model. I really like the fact that you have chosen such a real life method as the PEM model used by Novo Nordisk. | ||
| − | # I appreciate your idea of discussing your model by comparing it with other relevant project models as you have indicated it in the current last paragraph title (Discussion of Novo Nordisk's Project Execution Model compared to other project models). | + | # I appreciate your idea of discussing your model by comparing it with other relevant project models as you have indicated it in the current last paragraph title (Discussion of Novo Nordisk's Project Execution Model compared to other project models). = ''I changes this title, because it was too optimistic to do, and would remove the main focus, which are the PEM - i change it to be a discussion about pros and cons of the model, and how to use it in other industries.'' |
| − | # The article is nicely illustrated with the pictures which help the understanding. Although, I would suggest to name them as ‘’Figure 1, 2, 3, …etc.’’ which would allow to refer to the pictures more specifically at the relevant place of the text. | + | # The article is nicely illustrated with the pictures which help the understanding. Although, I would suggest to name them as ‘’Figure 1, 2, 3, …etc.’’ which would allow to refer to the pictures more specifically at the relevant place of the text. = ''Added more figures, and more pictures'' |
| + | # "A project is defined as: "A temporary endeavor undertaken to create a unique product, service or result"." --> Could you expound and describe more what do you mean under this project title? As for me, it is not so clear. = ''Agree that was a confusing sentence, and therefore I totally deleted'' | ||
# For further investigation: | # For further investigation: | ||
## I would suggest to consider writing about the concrete applications and limitations of the model chosen. | ## I would suggest to consider writing about the concrete applications and limitations of the model chosen. | ||
| − | ## It would be also nice to focus on the references and make a bibliography section at the end of the article. | + | ## It would be also nice to focus on the references and make a bibliography section at the end of the article. = ''Done'' |
Latest revision as of 14:37, 29 September 2015
Mette: Very nice topic choice that fits the requirements for the type of article. Remember the structure of a "method article". Look forward to reading more about this tool.
Reviewer 1:Andkamp
- Describes an interesting method developed by Novo Nordisk, a nice blend between case study and method description
- Minor English mistakes, that can be corrected through second time readind = Done
- Good presentation of the topics, however some minor grammar mistakes make it a little more difficult to be read
- Nice figures, but missing captions and misplacement could provide a better outlook. = Adjustet
- Main points are clear but not extensively described, in order the reader to get a better understanding of the topic.= I have try to write it more undertandeble
- No figure reference = Added
- More effort in inter-wiki links and hyperlinks in the text should be done = Done'
- Better matrix of plan communication of stakeholders = Deleted
- Missing references and bibliography = Added
- Interesting subject with various aspects
- Length of the article is small, as probably it is unfinished, but there is a clear enthusiasm on that subject = Was at the time unfinnished, and there are added a lot of extra :)
- Phases makes a concrete structure of the article but the sections should be better presented in the table of contents.
- It would be nice to see implementations on other business, as well as the pros and cons of this method = Done
- All in all, a nice subject that needs more effort in order to be useful and be connected with subjects such as Project Evaluation and Selection for the Formation of the Optimal Portfolio
[edit] Reviewer 2 - s141938
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- clear and concise => easy to read
- ideas presented in bullet points. Good idea
- Structure of a method visible
- planned links to other wiki pages. Great idea !
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- Remember to add captions and figure numbering = Done
- Write an abstract at the beginning and make a first section with quick explanation with the current intro => nicer layout and will remove the image from the introduction ) = Very useful comment, and I have use a lot of time to make a better intro. Although i keept the picture in the beginning, because i think it make a good overview of the model, however I have make it a lot smaller.
- In the new first section give a brief description of the phases so that I have a small overview of the whole thing = Very useful, and have use a lot of time to make a better intro
- no need of making sections in phase 2, unless it will be elaborated = changes
- This is it for now. I’ll give you more details once finished
[edit] Reviewer 3 - Biankajuh
- I have find the abstract of your article very well-designed which fulfill the role of introducing the main purpose and highlights of the article including a brief introduction to the PEM model. I really like the fact that you have chosen such a real life method as the PEM model used by Novo Nordisk.
- I appreciate your idea of discussing your model by comparing it with other relevant project models as you have indicated it in the current last paragraph title (Discussion of Novo Nordisk's Project Execution Model compared to other project models). = I changes this title, because it was too optimistic to do, and would remove the main focus, which are the PEM - i change it to be a discussion about pros and cons of the model, and how to use it in other industries.
- The article is nicely illustrated with the pictures which help the understanding. Although, I would suggest to name them as ‘’Figure 1, 2, 3, …etc.’’ which would allow to refer to the pictures more specifically at the relevant place of the text. = Added more figures, and more pictures
- "A project is defined as: "A temporary endeavor undertaken to create a unique product, service or result"." --> Could you expound and describe more what do you mean under this project title? As for me, it is not so clear. = Agree that was a confusing sentence, and therefore I totally deleted
- For further investigation:
- I would suggest to consider writing about the concrete applications and limitations of the model chosen.
- It would be also nice to focus on the references and make a bibliography section at the end of the article. = Done
