Talk:Construction modularization from a lean perspective

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*No figures therefore no copyright issue  
 
*No figures therefore no copyright issue  
 
*I think the overall wiki formation of the article is fine.  
 
*I think the overall wiki formation of the article is fine.  
 
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**'''Answer:''' Videos and pictures is implemented, was not finished at the time. .
 
Content aspects:
 
Content aspects:
  
 
*For practitioners it is a relevant article, because the topic is very relevant.
 
*For practitioners it is a relevant article, because the topic is very relevant.
 
*It is not specific related to PPPM. However, the idea lean and critical path is used in project management and scheduling.   
 
*It is not specific related to PPPM. However, the idea lean and critical path is used in project management and scheduling.   
'''**Answer:''' The PPPM relation is lean Construction management.   
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**'''Answer:''' The PPPM relation is lean Construction management.   
 
*The length of the article is fine. I don’t think it should be longer, but maybe a bit more in the “Preface” and maybe it is too basic.  
 
*The length of the article is fine. I don’t think it should be longer, but maybe a bit more in the “Preface” and maybe it is too basic.  
 
*I think the overall red thread is fine and the article seems coherent.
 
*I think the overall red thread is fine and the article seems coherent.
 
*The starting summary is good and works fine, but I think the “preface” and “abstact” could be merged together and be more precise in terms of starting the “red thread”.  
 
*The starting summary is good and works fine, but I think the “preface” and “abstact” could be merged together and be more precise in terms of starting the “red thread”.  
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**'''Answer:''' adopted and amended thanks
 
*The reference is missing.
 
*The reference is missing.
 
*I find it hard to say which material has been used. There should be a clear list of reference and link into the text.  
 
*I find it hard to say which material has been used. There should be a clear list of reference and link into the text.  
 
*There is no section “annotated bibliography”.
 
*There is no section “annotated bibliography”.
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**'''Answer:''' Done, annotated bibliography was not finished at the time.
 
*As far as I noticed, there were no link to other APPPM wiki article. But links to websites, that is fine.  
 
*As far as I noticed, there were no link to other APPPM wiki article. But links to websites, that is fine.  
 
*Own opinion is clearly stated in “ reflections on practice of modularization in the construction sector”
 
*Own opinion is clearly stated in “ reflections on practice of modularization in the construction sector”
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**'''Answer:''' Thanks wrong text headline, it comes further down now.
 
*There is no reason to think there is any type of plagiarism
 
*There is no reason to think there is any type of plagiarism
  
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* BSB term should be explained before used in the ABSTRACT PARAGRAPH
 
* BSB term should be explained before used in the ABSTRACT PARAGRAPH
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**'''Answer:''' It is, under T30 section.  Broad Sustainable Buildings Co. Ltd (BSB)
 
* I would suggest in general to create less complex and smaller sentences throughout the article in order to avoid confusion for the reader
 
* I would suggest in general to create less complex and smaller sentences throughout the article in order to avoid confusion for the reader
 
* Under Board Sustainable Building Co.Ltd paragraph there is a space mistake “ The2008..” and use past tense as well.  
 
* Under Board Sustainable Building Co.Ltd paragraph there is a space mistake “ The2008..” and use past tense as well.  
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**'''Answer:''' Adopted and amended thanks
 
* Also the numbering can become simpler not 1…..1….2….1 but instead.1……1.1….2…….2.1
 
* Also the numbering can become simpler not 1…..1….2….1 but instead.1……1.1….2…….2.1
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**'''Answer:''' Adopted and amended thanks
 
* Reference at the end of TH30 HOTEL, Modular Constructions impact on critical path, paragraph is missing?
 
* Reference at the end of TH30 HOTEL, Modular Constructions impact on critical path, paragraph is missing?
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**'''Answer:''' Adopted and amended thanks
 
* In the paragraphs under BSB's prefabrication technology reference is missing
 
* In the paragraphs under BSB's prefabrication technology reference is missing
 
* In lean Construction paragraph double “. . “ error and gap after “.”  Exist also in the second paragraph. Also reference is missing.
 
* In lean Construction paragraph double “. . “ error and gap after “.”  Exist also in the second paragraph. Also reference is missing.

Latest revision as of 18:11, 27 September 2015

LasseHoier87 reviewer 2

First impression is good, especially the use of a real life case is nice. The layout is thought through and seems to “guide” the reader through the topic. However, it could be "spiced" a bit up if there were some nice pictures, illustrations or even a video. This would "catch" the reader more i think.

Formal aspects: (Wiki article Peer Review template is used)

  • The article is as clearly stated in the article following a “case study”
  • No gramma faults or spelling.
  • Written in a fine engaging style, The sentence is too long and may be a bit too much direct style. Use more formal style.
  • No illustrations at all, you mention a video on youtube why not use that one. Maybe the figures showing the building or similar.
  • No figures
  • No figures
  • No figures
  • No figures therefore no copyright issue
  • I think the overall wiki formation of the article is fine.
    • Answer: Videos and pictures is implemented, was not finished at the time. .

Content aspects:

  • For practitioners it is a relevant article, because the topic is very relevant.
  • It is not specific related to PPPM. However, the idea lean and critical path is used in project management and scheduling.
    • Answer: The PPPM relation is lean Construction management.
  • The length of the article is fine. I don’t think it should be longer, but maybe a bit more in the “Preface” and maybe it is too basic.
  • I think the overall red thread is fine and the article seems coherent.
  • The starting summary is good and works fine, but I think the “preface” and “abstact” could be merged together and be more precise in terms of starting the “red thread”.
    • Answer: adopted and amended thanks
  • The reference is missing.
  • I find it hard to say which material has been used. There should be a clear list of reference and link into the text.
  • There is no section “annotated bibliography”.
    • Answer: Done, annotated bibliography was not finished at the time.
  • As far as I noticed, there were no link to other APPPM wiki article. But links to websites, that is fine.
  • Own opinion is clearly stated in “ reflections on practice of modularization in the construction sector”
    • Answer: Thanks wrong text headline, it comes further down now.
  • There is no reason to think there is any type of plagiarism



[[ (S142899_I am not aware of whether I am reviewer ½ or 3)

References are missing summary at the end.

A) Not many grammatical or spelling mistakes!

  • BSB term should be explained before used in the ABSTRACT PARAGRAPH
    • Answer: It is, under T30 section. Broad Sustainable Buildings Co. Ltd (BSB)
  • I would suggest in general to create less complex and smaller sentences throughout the article in order to avoid confusion for the reader
  • Under Board Sustainable Building Co.Ltd paragraph there is a space mistake “ The2008..” and use past tense as well.
    • Answer: Adopted and amended thanks
  • Also the numbering can become simpler not 1…..1….2….1 but instead.1……1.1….2…….2.1
    • Answer: Adopted and amended thanks
  • Reference at the end of TH30 HOTEL, Modular Constructions impact on critical path, paragraph is missing?
    • Answer: Adopted and amended thanks
  • In the paragraphs under BSB's prefabrication technology reference is missing
  • In lean Construction paragraph double “. . “ error and gap after “.” Exist also in the second paragraph. Also reference is missing.
  • Under BCB projects analyzed from a lean perspective paragraph data is rmentioned without reference.
  • “Broad Organization” in paragraph Reflections on practice of modularization in the construction sector could be with small letters

B)

  • Preface and Abstract probably should be in one paragraph
  • Logical paragraph flow without overlapping.
  • I would create a paragraph that incorporates the paragraphs: 3 Broad Group,4 Broad Sustainable Building Co. Ltd., 5 T30 Hotel

and name it “case T30 description”

C)

  • Congrats on summing up info and referring on them in Board Group paragraph.

Especially the summing up paragraph illustrates a critical support of the theory in combination of this case study.

  • I would add the “T30 HOTEL CASE STUDY” in the title of the article probably]]
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