Talk:Bubble Diagram
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*Nice to read, easy to follow structure | *Nice to read, easy to follow structure | ||
| + | **'''''[Thank you!]''''' | ||
*Nicely done with links to external wiki pages | *Nicely done with links to external wiki pages | ||
| + | **'''''[Thank you!]''''' | ||
*In the bubble chart figure; what do the axis names/units correspond to (you mention parts in the text, but maybe you could add this to the chart)? | *In the bubble chart figure; what do the axis names/units correspond to (you mention parts in the text, but maybe you could add this to the chart)? | ||
| + | **'''''[fixed with a better description]''''' | ||
* This sentence: “Although this tool excels in visualizing the portfolio, upstream processes are needs as comprehensive data analysis of all the dimensions of data.” I think it contains interesting information, but I don’t understand it. | * This sentence: “Although this tool excels in visualizing the portfolio, upstream processes are needs as comprehensive data analysis of all the dimensions of data.” I think it contains interesting information, but I don’t understand it. | ||
| + | **'''''[fixed]''''' | ||
*Nice introduction to portfolio management and link to the model part, but you start out by describing portfolio management and end up talking about PPM. Maybe it might be sensitive to separate those more and put a greater focus on PPM, as this is what you continue with in the next chapter. | *Nice introduction to portfolio management and link to the model part, but you start out by describing portfolio management and end up talking about PPM. Maybe it might be sensitive to separate those more and put a greater focus on PPM, as this is what you continue with in the next chapter. | ||
| + | **'''''[valid point i get to the point much faster now]''''' | ||
*The first few sentences of the ‘bubble chart/diagram’ repeat what you mention in the abstract. Might it be an idea to keep the abstract more generic and describe what it is used for rather then giving away to many details already? | *The first few sentences of the ‘bubble chart/diagram’ repeat what you mention in the abstract. Might it be an idea to keep the abstract more generic and describe what it is used for rather then giving away to many details already? | ||
| + | **'''''[Hmm.. I like to be very precise in abstracts, but as it is a short article i understand it is annoying to the the same thing twice. <br> | ||
| + | IT has been done a bit more generic but not to much as it then looses it point as an abstract]''''' | ||
*Would the illustration fit better into the method chapter? Than you could relate directly to it or maybe show other examples? | *Would the illustration fit better into the method chapter? Than you could relate directly to it or maybe show other examples? | ||
| + | **'''''[illustration moved and table added]''''' | ||
*This title: ” How can it be used and what are the effect (case study)” remember capital spelling (same for previous title) and effects got to be plural. | *This title: ” How can it be used and what are the effect (case study)” remember capital spelling (same for previous title) and effects got to be plural. | ||
| + | **'''''[true - was a draft - now corrected]''''' | ||
*This sentence: “In this version the horizontal axis represents the total discounted value of the projects over a period of time (often 5-20 years) and is often referred to as NPV (Net Present Value).” It’s good that you explain NPVs, but what is discounted value? | *This sentence: “In this version the horizontal axis represents the total discounted value of the projects over a period of time (often 5-20 years) and is often referred to as NPV (Net Present Value).” It’s good that you explain NPVs, but what is discounted value? | ||
| + | **'''''[having changed it as I assume that everybody that understand NVP knows that discounted value is the same]''''' | ||
*This chapter: “How can it be used and what are the effect (case study)” Would it make sense to merge it with your conclusion. Some elements state the same and you don’t really elaborate on the “how can it be used part”. | *This chapter: “How can it be used and what are the effect (case study)” Would it make sense to merge it with your conclusion. Some elements state the same and you don’t really elaborate on the “how can it be used part”. | ||
| + | **'''''[True - The alternatives-discussion-conclusion have been changed]''''' | ||
Good work! (or well on the way since you mention its not done:-)) | Good work! (or well on the way since you mention its not done:-)) | ||
| + | <br><br>'''''[In general good feedback]''''' | ||
== Comments from "Pppm student" == | == Comments from "Pppm student" == | ||
*The flow and the order of the sections in the article are good. | *The flow and the order of the sections in the article are good. | ||
| + | **'''''[Thank you!]''''' | ||
*The text is easy to read. | *The text is easy to read. | ||
| + | **'''''[Thank you!]''''' | ||
*Great with all the links in the article. | *Great with all the links in the article. | ||
| + | **'''''[Thank you!]''''' | ||
*It is a little wired when you read exactly the same sentences again from the abstract in the start of the article. Maybe the abstract can be rewritten in some way with new formulations. | *It is a little wired when you read exactly the same sentences again from the abstract in the start of the article. Maybe the abstract can be rewritten in some way with new formulations. | ||
| + | **'''''[true - rewritten to a bit more generic form and rephrasing ]''''' | ||
*It would be nice with a better description of both the many versions of the BC and the different methods you mention in the article. | *It would be nice with a better description of both the many versions of the BC and the different methods you mention in the article. | ||
| + | **'''''[True - i added a table to help with the understanding]''''' | ||
**You can maybe use some more figures of the different versions to support the text in the section "Bubble Chart/Diagram". | **You can maybe use some more figures of the different versions to support the text in the section "Bubble Chart/Diagram". | ||
| + | **'''''[I would like to but can't see whih figures would support my text - table was added]''''' | ||
*If it is possible to find a simple example of the Bubble Chart "in use", it could make the article even more interesting. | *If it is possible to find a simple example of the Bubble Chart "in use", it could make the article even more interesting. | ||
| + | **'''''[I tried to bring in the pharmaceutical example, but the literature is vary limited]''''' | ||
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| + | <br>'''''[Fine feedback - a bit scarce, but also a simple subject]''''' | ||
Latest revision as of 23:40, 1 December 2014
[edit] Article review by student:
- Nice to read, easy to follow structure
- [Thank you!]
- Nicely done with links to external wiki pages
- [Thank you!]
- In the bubble chart figure; what do the axis names/units correspond to (you mention parts in the text, but maybe you could add this to the chart)?
- [fixed with a better description]
- This sentence: “Although this tool excels in visualizing the portfolio, upstream processes are needs as comprehensive data analysis of all the dimensions of data.” I think it contains interesting information, but I don’t understand it.
- [fixed]
- Nice introduction to portfolio management and link to the model part, but you start out by describing portfolio management and end up talking about PPM. Maybe it might be sensitive to separate those more and put a greater focus on PPM, as this is what you continue with in the next chapter.
- [valid point i get to the point much faster now]
- The first few sentences of the ‘bubble chart/diagram’ repeat what you mention in the abstract. Might it be an idea to keep the abstract more generic and describe what it is used for rather then giving away to many details already?
- [Hmm.. I like to be very precise in abstracts, but as it is a short article i understand it is annoying to the the same thing twice.
- [Hmm.. I like to be very precise in abstracts, but as it is a short article i understand it is annoying to the the same thing twice.
IT has been done a bit more generic but not to much as it then looses it point as an abstract]
- Would the illustration fit better into the method chapter? Than you could relate directly to it or maybe show other examples?
- [illustration moved and table added]
- This title: ” How can it be used and what are the effect (case study)” remember capital spelling (same for previous title) and effects got to be plural.
- [true - was a draft - now corrected]
- This sentence: “In this version the horizontal axis represents the total discounted value of the projects over a period of time (often 5-20 years) and is often referred to as NPV (Net Present Value).” It’s good that you explain NPVs, but what is discounted value?
- [having changed it as I assume that everybody that understand NVP knows that discounted value is the same]
- This chapter: “How can it be used and what are the effect (case study)” Would it make sense to merge it with your conclusion. Some elements state the same and you don’t really elaborate on the “how can it be used part”.
- [True - The alternatives-discussion-conclusion have been changed]
Good work! (or well on the way since you mention its not done:-))
[In general good feedback]
[edit] Comments from "Pppm student"
- The flow and the order of the sections in the article are good.
- [Thank you!]
- The text is easy to read.
- [Thank you!]
- Great with all the links in the article.
- [Thank you!]
- It is a little wired when you read exactly the same sentences again from the abstract in the start of the article. Maybe the abstract can be rewritten in some way with new formulations.
- [true - rewritten to a bit more generic form and rephrasing ]
- It would be nice with a better description of both the many versions of the BC and the different methods you mention in the article.
- [True - i added a table to help with the understanding]
- You can maybe use some more figures of the different versions to support the text in the section "Bubble Chart/Diagram".
- [I would like to but can't see whih figures would support my text - table was added]
- If it is possible to find a simple example of the Bubble Chart "in use", it could make the article even more interesting.
- [I tried to bring in the pharmaceutical example, but the literature is vary limited]
[Fine feedback - a bit scarce, but also a simple subject]
