Talk:Lean Tools in Project Management
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* The article needs some more work, and be aware of grammar and structure of sentences. Try not to use very long sentences as it makes it difficult to read. | * The article needs some more work, and be aware of grammar and structure of sentences. Try not to use very long sentences as it makes it difficult to read. | ||
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+ | * Words missing to complete a sentence in the abstract : “The crucial for a p…” | ||
+ | * Good structure | ||
+ | * Very good brief introduction to Lean, clear and easy to understand | ||
+ | * Add a link when you quote the “8 wastes” | ||
+ | * About the A3 tool, it may be good to add a link to one of the article from Fall 2014 | ||
+ | * Some grammatical mistakes, for example “methodology” instead of “mythology” | ||
+ | * Don’t forget to fill the missing parts | ||
+ | * Apparently there is still somework to do on it, good luck, you started it well | ||
+ | * Very interesting topic, it seems well documented |
Revision as of 17:44, 22 September 2015
Mette: I like the idea and the topic you have chosen. Lean contains many tools, so you could maybe consider if you should focus on only one tool in case of not getting your hands too full. Your article may end up a bit generic, and not as interesting as it could be because it is too broad. So think about tool for risk management and then pick one you can really go into details with.
Reviewer 2: Alise
- Nicely structured. It is clean and has a good overview.
- There are some sentences that can be written better. F. Ex. “but during the past years have lean been established….” Which would be better when written like this “but during the past years lean has been established… “
- You should not write that something is impossible. If it is a process for something to be done, it does not encourage anyone when they read the word “impossible”. (Seek perfection)
- When writing about “From Lean to Lean Project Management”, the first sentence does not make much sense. What are you writing a brief summary about? Also, a summary would be more than four bullet points. It would explain something, either what you will write about or what you have written about.
- The definition of project management should be all the way at the top. People need to know what they are reading about. Also, make it clear what the definition actually is, and where it ends. Maybe start the next sentence as a new paragraph.
- “The 8 different relates to production” – 8 what?
- I don’t think you should use questions in the article.
- What is an A3 tool? A description of this would be good if it is a lean tool.
- Some pictures of the different tools would be nice.
- What is a leader imagination? (The Gemba Walk)
- Some of the examples you have used are a little too specific.
- See difference; effect vs. affect.
- You are not close to the 3000 word count yet, but keep working!
- Remember references!
- The article needs some more work, and be aware of grammar and structure of sentences. Try not to use very long sentences as it makes it difficult to read.
Wiki feedbacks from s142823
- Words missing to complete a sentence in the abstract : “The crucial for a p…”
- Good structure
- Very good brief introduction to Lean, clear and easy to understand
- Add a link when you quote the “8 wastes”
- About the A3 tool, it may be good to add a link to one of the article from Fall 2014
- Some grammatical mistakes, for example “methodology” instead of “mythology”
- Don’t forget to fill the missing parts
- Apparently there is still somework to do on it, good luck, you started it well
- Very interesting topic, it seems well documented