Revision as of 09:09, 29 September 2015

Mette: I like this topic, however, I suggest to focus on a specific area, otherwise, your article may end up a bit generic, and not as interesting as it could be because it is too broad. So think about tools for fine-tune ideas for projects and then pick one you can really go into details with.

Reviewer 1: s113665

• Very nice structure! Nice overview and easy accessibility.
  • Thanks
• Looks good with the graphics.
• Language is kind of hard to understand.
  • A few sentences should be rephrased. I would recommend having that in the back of your head when you’re proofreading it.
    • I agree and changed some of the sentences when I reread it.
• Minor spelling errors
  • Tried to find and fix them
• Missing words
  • Such as ‘the’ and ‘it’
    • I noticed couple section and added them
• Punctuation (long sentences).
  • Try splitting some of them up and perhaps rewrite a few of them.
    • Also notice some hard to understand sentences and rewrited them
• The article seems a bit generic caused by the broad approach.
  • The limitation and conclusion may, however, help this issue on the right path, looking forward to revisit it!
    • I tried to make more sense to them now
• Even though you basically use the method recommended, I have a hard time follow the ‘red-line’ through the current article (related to the bullet point above).
  • Perhaps write a ‘sub-conclusion’ within each chapter of the current article, to relate that given chapter to the main subject.
    • I changed some of the chapters to make it more understandable

A single proofread and adding of the ‘red-line’ throughout the article will make it a nice and well-defined article! …Of course you need to finish it as well... ☺ happy writing and read you later! Thank you for helpful and good comments :)

Reviewer 2: S141543

• This is an interesting idea to write about
• I do not understand what sentence two in the abstract means, possibly it should be re-written
• Otherwise, the abstract looks good to me
• Project management chapter seems to be more about a specific project than the concept of project management
• The planning section is well done in my opinion
• Could come up with an example of a decision that has to be made in the decision making phase.
• The article needs references
• The word structure in the article is a little confusing at times
• I do realize that this article is a work in progress

Reviewer 3: Lea

• You are following the method article. Unfortunately, I am not able to follow the thread of your article. I am not sure if you are done writing yet, but in my opinion there has to be a higher focus on where you want to lead the reader.
• The subject sounds interesting and it applies to the course. As mentioned above the structure could hace more precision and guidance in order for the article to have more meaning.
• Grammar is good. Some sentences are too long for me (personally) to read. Maybe split some of the sentences to let the reader understand the text better.
• The figures you have used correspond to the text and make sense.
• Concerning the length, you are on a good way, but there is still room left to fill around 3000 words.
• The abstract has a good length but does not give clarity about the article. Maybe try to explain the table of contents to the reader.
• Sources and Annotated bibliography: Up to now there are no sources. Make sure to add sources in order to avoid plagiarism.