Talk:Implementing KPIs
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* “''but it IS WITH an overall APPROACH, and not very specific''.” | * “''but it IS WITH an overall APPROACH, and not very specific''.” | ||
* “T''he Prince 2 standards [4], gets yet TO a level higher''” Is it singular or plural ? The same remains for “These includes” : This includes ? | * “T''he Prince 2 standards [4], gets yet TO a level higher''” Is it singular or plural ? The same remains for “These includes” : This includes ? |
Revision as of 19:05, 25 November 2014
Feedback - Char
FORMAL ASPECTS
- Good critical approach
- Nice language
- Good and clear structure
- Code the references.
- The length is good. You cover the chosen subject.
CONTENT ASPECTS Introduction
- The introduction is very catchy
So, what does the literature say Comparable standards
- You could add a more history view on the KPI in order to create and understanding of he term. When where the term used first, develop etc.
- You could create a table with the different standards, their description, KIPs and diversity. This will create a overview of the different standards and make it easier for the reader to compare them.
Additional related material
- Look at CMMI (Capability Maturity Model Integration). This is a process that determines/viewer (by some kind of measurement) maturity of different processes and thereby show where there need to be improved
The setup How to define KPIs
- Very good discussion about the number of measurements.
Scorecards and Dashboards
- Add figure of the Scorecards and Dashboards
- Explain what parameters the two setups are containing in order to create overview and how they are using the information and data.
- You could expand your description about the differences between the scorecards and dashboards. The whole section is a bit short.
Discussion Strength and weaknesses
- Good discussion. You are covering many different perspectives.
Implementation advice
- The examples create a good overview and understanding.
Feedback provided by Lyngby
I was happy to learn more about the implementation of KPIs and some softwares related. It is an interesting article. Your cross-references are very detailed and you do not forget to categorize your article. The use of some concrete examples (introduction, additional related material) make it more pleasant to read.
However :
- I would add an abstract (summary) to help the reader quickly determine the article´s purpose.
- Comparing the standards, you could add more details about each of them. For example mention that PMI is an American Standard, IPMA is a European one, Prince 2 is from the UK and ISO is international.
- I find the paragraph about Scorecards/Dashboards interesting, but not detailed enough. For example, a concrete example would make it more relevant.
- You could draw a table to summarize the strengths and weaknesses at the end of the paragraph Strengths and Weaknesses.
- It would be great if you could add some pictures, for example a picture showing the results that can be obtained using Single KPIs/Klipfolio.
- It could be nice to provide concrete examples of companies/projects using theses softwares.
- I would add a conclusion.
- I think there are some grammatical mistakes. Here are some corrections:
INTRODUCTION :
- No matter, whether you have a small one man business or is (are?) the director for a large corporation, whether you manage a project, a portfolio or are just trying (are trying/try?) to get a small task like making a grocery list and getting the shopping done in time, the knowledge of whether you are on the right track and on time can prove crucial.”
- for some reasoning : Do you mean “for some reasons” ?
- "more or less none of the chief executives” Do you mean ”almost none” ?
COMPARABLE STANDARDS:
- “The ISO 21500 standard [2] has most of it focus toward's” : The he ISO 21500 standard [2] is mostly focused towards
- “but it IS WITH an overall APPROACH, and not very specific.”
- “The Prince 2 standards [4], gets yet TO a level higher” Is it singular or plural ? The same remains for “These includes” : This includes ?
ADDITIONAL RELATED MATERIAL:
- “The executive management does not have a need for information regarding the day to day performance. They need a larger scale…” In the first sentence you use a singular and a plural in the second one. I think it would be better to choose either for singular or plural in both sentences.
- “3 monthS or 6 monthS'”
HOW TO DEFINE KPIs:
- “First of all, as explained elsewhere,” You should maybe precise where/in which part of the article. For example, say, “as explained in the previous paragraph”.
- “ having the grand overview,” I would say large/broad overview
DISCUSSION:
- “Strength and Weakness: I would either use a plural or singular, but the same for both of them.
- “if the KPIs implemented are not performing properly, are not properly defined or haVE some defects.” Use a synonymous for properly : correctly/adequately
- “management runS the risk”
- Avoid repetition of run the risk : take the chance ?
- “A list OF a few examples”
- I think there are some typing errors:
- “KPIs had a quick revival when theY hit the management market back ”
- “Monitoring and Controlling Process Group or project work” I would only use capital letters for the word Monitoring since you do not use any for project work.
- “on a very high, general, level” There are too many commas.
- “The task pf comparing performance” : OF
- “bypically” : Typically
- Some sentences are a too long according to me, especially in the introduction. I would split some of them to make the reading easier.
For example:
“If you are a single person, doing a simple task, odds are, that you are at least somewhat aware of the progress. But if you are a manager, with multiple persons working with you towards a common goal, perhaps even trying to juggle multiple projects within a portfolio, it can quickly prove more difficult to maintain the overview of the combined work progress.”
Good luck