Talk:The relevance of management organizational change

Latest revision as of 01:48, 26 November 2014

[edit] Review by Emmha

• Shouldn’t the headline be: The relevance of Organisational Change Management, instead of, the relevance of management organizational change?

• As I read through your text, you are more interested in how to apply organisational change in a proper manor rather than the relevance it. You explain why it is important to renew the operation and strategy according to the change in society/stakeholders etc., which is a reason why organisational change management is relevant. It seems like the implementation is the problem, so why not show cases where it’s gone wrong and why that is to explain what not to do. I know it means changing the article, but that was just an idea, from reading what you got so far.

• Nice short explanation of what organisational change is, you might want to move that explanation to the beginning? You might also consider the change management, where the general theory is that people do not like change and how the manager has to overcome these obstacles. This is also a reason for why implementation is hard, but not so much concerning the relevance of it.

• Parsing: There are some grammar errors here and there so you should go through the text again. I think most of them are typing errors, like in the second line it says ‘hot’ instead of ‘how’. The first sentence is way too long.

• It is a good idea to explain how the organizational change management can affect the project, program and portfolio management, but I would spend more words on those.

[edit] Feedback provided by Madrid:

I consider you have chosen a really good subject to talk about that makes people want to keep reading. Overall, you include key points that must be in an introduction but some of the sentences were too long from my point of view. Sometimes, I find the structure of the article a bit confusing and difficult to follow, specially for the second paragraph.

However, I like the fact that you explicitly mention the reasons for applying your method in the portfolio, project and program management's context. It was also nice to see that references were made throughout your entire article, well done!

Here I make some comments that I hope will help you improving your final article:

- I would add a title for your abstract/introduction/background history so the reader can determine the paragraphs' purpose. In addition, I would rename your title as 'The relevance of Organizational Change Management'.

- You should carefully proofread your writing to spot any grammatical or typing mistakes, here are some of the ones that I have checked (within my English level, I'm not native so I may make mistakes too):

FIRST PARAGRAPH :

• enterprises need to identify...
• in the future and how to manage the change required to get there.

SECOND PARAGRAPH :

• This seems to be...

THIRD PARAGRAPH :

• Change is efficiently accomplished...
• associated with these implementations...

Keep up with your work and kind regards!