Talk:Stakeholder Management

Revision as of 14:17, 26 November 2014

Review - B wiki

Concept aspects:

• In general, the structure is good, although I would have used shorter headings to help the reader
• Length around 2300 words is ok for this topic. May be, you could have explained more in detail some aspects you only name
• In the first section, you could briefly introduce who is Freeman and what is Prince2
• In the “How and when should you create stakeholder engagement?” section, I find quite messy the citations from different sources. Maybe it is a problem of punctuation marks

Formal aspects:

• Try to use more punctuation marks, such as commas. These way, it is easier for the reader
• Some grammatical and spelling errors found:
  • Not appropriate use of auxiliary verbs: “it is important that these are discussed”
  • Past participles: “be classified”

thank you - that was a typo

• • “Performance” is written together

I think this hyphenation happened when i copied the tekst into the htlm code.

• Sometimes not appropriate usage of References
  • If you are saying in the text “as described by”, you should say who said it and then put the reference

I have now added what article I am refereing to.

• The figures are helpful to understand the concept, but maybe more explanation is needed

I have now added more explanation to the Typology figure, this was the intention the whole time, i just didnt have the time to do it for the first deadline.

Review by Bdmn

• Overall a good structured wiki-article with good language.
• Short and concise, which is good! But some parts can be explained more. E.g. stakeholder theories

Content aspects:

• Is the project group the only downward stakeholder?
• The paragraph under the heading "How and when should you create stakeholder engagement?" is a bit difficult to grab. It is a bit confusing with only the quotes. Maybe try to rewrite it more fluently or restructure it by creating a table.
• Instrumental stakeholder theory is mentioned but not explained. Maybe add a part in the section of stakeholder theories?

Formal aspects:

• Sub-headings can make the paragraphs more structured. E.g. in "How and when should you create stakeholder engagement?" the picture divides the text in two parts with different theme. A sub-heading for the second part can make it easier to see the connection to the first part.
• Pictures
  • Refer to the pictures to make it easier to know when to look at it. E.g. I don't know when to look at "The typology of Stakeholder Integration Mechanisms"
  • A brief explanation to the picture would help. E.g. I don't understand the picture "The typology of Stakeholder Integration Mechanisms"
  • Remember to add a source to the picture
• Overall good use of citations and relevant sources, however:
  • some citations are not "wiki-style" e.g. (Donaldson & Preston, 1995), (Jones, 1995, p. 422) and (Dill, 1958)
  • some parts are missing citations, e.g. first part of the discussion includes many statements without sources.