Talk:Systems Engineering versus Project Management, a comparative study

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Feedback by Lasse Madsen

Fist impression:

  • The article is very well structured, and invites the reader to read along.
  • The grammar and spelling is very good, and the content is easy to understand due to the structure and grammar. I would though, suggest to add additional "," where sentences get long. Especially moving towards the end of the article.

Formal aspects

  • I would put the introduction before the content to provide a read threat.
  • I miss some more WIKI formatting, ie.
    • Categories: [[Categories:Management]]
    • References to other wiki sites: [[project management]]
    • Figures could alternatively be in the right hand side in stead of as part of the text. The problem is, that if you have a small screen, the figures will go out of the screen. Code: [[File:FILENAME.png‎|200px|thumb|right|FIGURE TEXT]]
    • I miss figure text. Could be solved by the method above.
  • I would consider to use the references more than once like: this [1], then the same reference could be used here [1] and here [1] and even here [1] as well :-). (look into the code of this to see how it could be done, if you are interested.
  • Maybe include figure references, if the figures is not reproduced by the author of the article.

Content aspects

  • The article clearly relates to the course, and provides a good overview of methods of systems enginnering vs. project management.
  • I would have enjoyed to read examples of uses of the V-model and how this could help practioneers in relations to other models.
  • I like that the author of the article finishes off with reflections of practise.

Abstract

  • The sentences get very long. Consider some more "," and "."
  • You could refer to other WIKI articles like this: Project Management (Code: [[Project Management]])

Introduction to mindset and framework

  • The section contains very long statements like this one: "Project management is considered both a profession and a generic discipline for managing projects, applicable for all kinds of organisations and all types of projects. Project management as a discipline offers an integrated set of processes and methods which – if applied correctly and as intended – will support the project manager in his effort to control and manage the activities of his project, regardless of the specific field, scope or organisation involved.Characteristic of Project Management is the focus on management processes and their integration." -And i can't really figure out where this is from, if you wrote it your self or which source you have it from. Could you add sources to statements and paragraphs like these?
  • Should the following sentence be in italic as the other definitions?: "is defined as: an integrated set of elements, subsystems, or assemblies that accomplish a defined objective. These elements include products (hardware, software, firmware), processes, people, information, techniques, facilities, services, and other support elements. [6]"
  • Is it possible to add a section where you state: Who uses what, (like: System enginering is mainly used by: x, y, and z and Project management ....)

Comparing Project Management and Systems Engineering

  • There is only one reference in the whole section, consider adding more.
  • The formulation: "When searching the internet" is in my opinion not very academic, maybe consider rewriting.

Reflections on practice

Used for reference example

  1. 1.0 1.1 1.2 1.3 Hasan, Helen, and Alanah Kazlauskas. "The Cynefin framework: putting complexity into perspective." (2014): 55.
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