Talk:Creating a positive culture around failure in project management
reviewed by Saeh0803
To start with I would place the Introduction in the beginning of the document, followed by a table of content and please add some more sentences in introduction to describe the topic :) I miss introduction of your topic..
long sentences, make them a bit shorter :)
Over all i like your topic and your article, your English is understandable.. some part is very short, maybe you can describe a bit more, so it gives sense for reader. (if it is possible)
I hope you can use my comments
best of luck
Sube - Review
Greetings
Congratulation! you have wrote a wiki style article:)
First of all, I think your writing skills are very sufficient, all text is readable and make sense! Which is very nice...
Secondly, I believe that the combination of topics your chose is relevant and I see the purpose, eventhough it havent been tried out in practice:)
Thirdly, NOTE that the review text will flow out of screen to the right hand side... I do not know how to fix this!
Nevertheless, I have made you some recommendations on how I believe the article can improve.
General Guidelines;
* Quotes are hidden in the text, maybe make them Italic, so they stand out from the normal text. Btw, you got a lot of quotes which I think is good:) * As a reader im wondering, which organisations benefits from the methodology you describe? Can any organisation benefit from this, or is it more innovation oriented organisation? - maybe in the limitation of the method. I know you write the method is for projects managers - but are there any other limitations...
Start:
* When I am entering the page, the first thing I see is a table of contents. I think it would be beneficial if you peptalked the topic a bit before the content is presented. That way around, as a reader you make more sense of the table of content, and know why this topic is even relevant. * You could add the Article Category there aswell, maybe in the end.
Introduction
* I believe this section is more like "Research Area" or "Scope". I feel like an introduction is more about the topic and the reason why it is relevant - You could make a abstract/intro to intreak the reader and then rename the Introduction. * Where are the Embracing Failure Key values? It sounds interresting:) I cannot find them!
Acceptance of failure
* Minor thing: I wondered who Cass was, untill it maked sense, Cassidy. Might want to edit Cass to Cassidy.
Learn from your mistakes
* Consider some general writing about Single and Double Loop learning...
How is embracing failure used
* I think you might want to descibe what the Fuzzy Front End is all about, I kind of get it, but I am not sure... * Revisit this sentence; Embracing Failures role in the Fuzzy Front End of a project The first stages of a project or the planning part of a program are identified as the Fuzzy Front End (FFE), which hold a lot of importance in the execution of the project. * Remember Fuzzy Front End, some parts it is fuzzy front end. - Maybe use the FFE - but personally I belive Fuzzy Front End sounds good:) * Make sure you do this; "This has also served as an inspiration to the thesis of the concrete implementation suggestions this article is presenting."
The original Spiral Model
* Minor thing; Remember to make puncturemarks after each bulletpoint.
Adaption of the Spiral Model
* I think adaptation or application is more correct - do not kill me if I am wrong.
Visualized testing and prototyping area
* Visualized testing and prototype areas? * First sentence: Remove "from it".
Discussion of the method
* Nevertheless is in one word:) * Last section; long sentence...
Conclusion
* The start is klumpsy "It has in this article been tried... " - rewrite:) Maybe something like; "This article provides projects managers with a method to improve their blabla.." * Second section, revisit the whole sentence "...the Spiral Model should be able to help with in..." I get the point but make sure to visualise that it is a "indskudt sætning":)
Nice article:) Hope you can make use of my recommendations... Good Luck Have Fun!
