Talk:Actions element

Feedback 1 | Reviewer name: Tom Ruetgers

Question 1 · TEXT

Quality of the summary:

Does the summary make the key focus, insights and/or contribution of the article clear?

What would you suggest to improve?

Answer 1

Hi Tianhao, first of all: Please do not take my feedback personal, I will try to look on your article from a different point of view and try to find something what you might improve. But as you know, I am in the exact same position as you are right now, so I do not know what is "right or wrong". Thus, consider this feedback more as a recommendation than a valuation. cheerio, Tom

Let's go: In the abstract I do not catch 100% what an actions element is and what I can learn from this article. Is an action element just ANY task, activity in a project management environment or certain ones? Maybe you could express (in simple words) what is going to expect me in your article. For example: Overview of the most common/important (?) actions element, in each step of a project and HOW to deal with them. Because you name the reasons for failures in projects and the solution is to manage these actions from scratch. Ok - but probably these project manager, who failed to meet all objectives of their project were aware of that fact. Maybe you should think more practical orientated: Imagine you are a project manager and you are working on your first project in a company and you struggle to manage action elements in your real life project. So you do what ever person does when he or she struggles: you google and find this article. And then you want to know, which action element can I use in which phase of a project (and which not, and why?) and how do I manage them right, that I will not end up as all the other project manager, who screwed their project over

Question 2 · TEXT

Structure and logic of the article:

Is the argument clear?

Is there a logical flow to the article?

Does one part build upon the other?

Is the article consistent in its argument and free of contradictions?

What would you suggest to improve?

Answer 2

Yes, the structure of the article is clear, but I am missing a little bit a "red line" through the content. For example: why did you structure a project into these steps? I guess, because the it's the PMI standard, right?:-) So maybe you can link this a bit more to project management theory - I do not want to call it "name dropping" but follow and name the approach which you choose (prince2 or PMI), I think the TAs or Professor like that. It's obvious that you have not finished yet, but if you analyze the limits, you could also sum up the benefits and then argue, why actions elements are highly important for PM - so you could link back to your statement in the abstract

Question 3 · TEXT

Grammar and style:

Is the writing free of grammatical and spelling errors?

Is the language precise without unnecessary fill words?

What would you suggest to improve?

Answer 3

Well, I am not a native speaker, so I might be not the best person to detect spelling errors, but grammar and spelling seems fine for me. In the beginning of your wiki article you tend to use unnecessary complicate expression to explain something simple. Do not take it to casual but I would prefer to read through it with a good flow and simple grammer and words, since this is a wiki article and not a research paper.

Question 4 · TEXT

Figures and tables:

Are figures and tables clear?

Do they summarize the key points of the article in a meaningful way?

What would you suggest to improve?

Answer 4

At the moment your wiki article does not contain of any tables or picture. I would like to see a flow from start to end of the project, which action element I should use in each stage and maybe also which PMI tool can I use for applying the action elemetns - could be another good part to proof that you are familiar with the PMI standards and tools

Question 5 · TEXT

Interest and relevance:

Is the article of high practical and / or academic relevance?

Is it made clear in the article why / how it is relevant?

What would you suggest to improve?

Answer 5

The article explains what action elements are and where they get used in a project management environment. You could focus a little bit more on the practical approach, and refer to PMI / Prince2 standards

Question 6 · TEXT

Depth of treatment:

Is the article interesting for a practitioner or academic to read?

Does it make a significant contribution beyond a cursory web search?

What would you suggest to improve?

Answer 6

Right now the scope of the article is rather wide and scratches on the surface of several topics. I do not know if you have planned to deep dive a little bit more into each chapter? And you could improve the transitions between the different chapters.

Question 7 · TEXT

Annotated bibliography:

Does the article properly cite and acknowledge previous work?

Does it briefly summarize the key references at the end of the article?

Is it based on empirical data instead of opinion?

What would you suggest to improve?

Answer 7

You haven't add an annotated bibliography yet. Check the popular wiki articles, how to properly add annotated bilbiography.

Comment: I wrote the feedback on Saturday morning at 8:00, the article has changed in the meantime