Revision as of 02:09, 26 November 2014

Val review

I would like to start saying that I learnt something reading your article, which is a good point. The structure is logical and you manage to turn the complexity of your topic into an easy reading article. I divided my feedback in 3 categories that are the following:

Formal aspects

• You should try to introduce the wiki format for references [1] You can also have a look to other articles who use it
• figure 1 is missing
• It is hard to see the legend/caption in figure 2. You can add a caption using Wiki formatting.
• "Executives" or "executives? I think you should choose one of the writing and use the same for the whole article

Grammar and Spelling

Few errors here. To find them, use the research tool.

• deferral instead of deferal
• "As Lee Merkhofer consulting states. It is not beneficial for software developers to make advanced PPM software targeting niche markets."?
• "The bottom line is that even though PPM decision making software is adapted by many companies it fail"s" to gain user acceptance."

Content aspects

• Your article is mostly didactic but sometimes you take strong positions like in this sentence: "Even though Cooper R. argues that poor tools are better than no tools I would argue that a tool that distorts the result is worse." Maybe you should stay pedagogic.
• "From 1990 - 1999 IT investments rose from 9% - 22%" => % of what?
• Your article misses maybe a conclusion?

PEER REVIEW BY QWERTY