Talk:Development phase of idea to project

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Mette: I like this topic, however, I suggest to focus on a specific area, otherwise, your article may end up a bit generic, and not as interesting as it could be because it is too broad. So think about tool for risk management and then pick one you can really go into details with.
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Mette: I like this topic, however, I suggest to focus on a specific area, otherwise, your article may end up a bit generic, and not as interesting as it could be because it is too broad. So think about tools for fine-tune ideas for projects and then pick one you can really go into details with.
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=Reviewer 1: s113665=
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* Very nice structure! Nice overview and easy accessibility.
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** ''Thanks''
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* Looks good with the graphics.
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* Language is kind of hard to understand.
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** A few sentences should be rephrased. I would recommend having that in the back of your head when you’re proofreading it.
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***'' I agree and changed some of the sentences when I reread it.
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* Minor spelling errors
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**''Tried to find and fix them''
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* Missing words
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** Such as ‘the’ and ‘it’
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***''I noticed couple section and added them''
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* Punctuation (long sentences).
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** Try splitting some of them up and perhaps rewrite a few of them.
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***'' Also notice some hard to understand sentences and rewrited them''
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* The article seems a bit generic caused by the broad approach.
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** The limitation and conclusion may, however, help this issue on the right path, looking forward to revisit it!
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***'' I tried to make more sense to them now''
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* Even though you basically use the method recommended, I have a hard time follow the ‘red-line’ through the current article (related to the bullet point above).
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** Perhaps write a ‘sub-conclusion’ within each chapter of the current article, to relate that given chapter to the main subject.
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***'' I changed some of the chapters to make it more understandable''
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A single proofread and adding of the ‘red-line’ throughout the article will make it a nice and well-defined article! …Of course you need to finish it as well... ☺ happy writing and read you later!
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''Thank you for helpful and good comments :)
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=Reviewer 2: S141543=
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* This is an interesting idea to write about
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** ''Nice that you like it
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* I do not understand what sentence two in the abstract means, possibly it should be re-written
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** ''I agree it was badly made, now it is changed''
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* Otherwise, the abstract looks good to me
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**''Thanks''
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* Project management chapter seems to be more about a specific project than the concept of project management
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**'' I modified it to make it more clear
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* The planning section is well done in my opinion
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**''Ok''
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* Could come up with an example of a decision that has to be made in the decision making phase.
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* The article needs references
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**''Added them''
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* The word structure in the article is a little confusing at times
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**'' I changed then and tried to make it better
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* I do realize that this article is a work in progress
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**'' It was :)''
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=Reviewer 3: Lea=
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*You are following the method article. Unfortunately, I am not able to follow the thread of your article. I am not sure if you are done writing yet, but in my opinion there has to be a higher focus on where you want to lead the reader.
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**'' I have made changes now''
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*The subject sounds interesting and it applies to the course. As mentioned above the structure could hace more precision and guidance in order for the article to have more meaning.
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*Grammar is good. Some sentences are too long for me (personally) to read. Maybe split some of the sentences to let the reader understand the text better.
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**'' I agree and changed some of the sentences.
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*The figures you have used correspond to the text and make sense.
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**''Ok''
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*Concerning the length, you are on a good way, but there is still room left to fill around 3000 words.
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**'' I have added length on it''
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*The abstract has a good length but does not give clarity about the article. Maybe try to explain the table of contents to the reader.
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** '' I made minor changes to that but not much''
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*Sources and Annotated bibliography: Up to now there are no sources. Make sure to add sources in order to avoid plagiarism.
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**'' Those have been added''

Latest revision as of 10:29, 29 September 2015

Mette: I like this topic, however, I suggest to focus on a specific area, otherwise, your article may end up a bit generic, and not as interesting as it could be because it is too broad. So think about tools for fine-tune ideas for projects and then pick one you can really go into details with.

[edit] Reviewer 1: s113665

  • Very nice structure! Nice overview and easy accessibility.
    • Thanks
  • Looks good with the graphics.
  • Language is kind of hard to understand.
    • A few sentences should be rephrased. I would recommend having that in the back of your head when you’re proofreading it.
      • I agree and changed some of the sentences when I reread it.
  • Minor spelling errors
    • Tried to find and fix them
  • Missing words
    • Such as ‘the’ and ‘it’
      • I noticed couple section and added them
  • Punctuation (long sentences).
    • Try splitting some of them up and perhaps rewrite a few of them.
      • Also notice some hard to understand sentences and rewrited them
  • The article seems a bit generic caused by the broad approach.
    • The limitation and conclusion may, however, help this issue on the right path, looking forward to revisit it!
      • I tried to make more sense to them now
  • Even though you basically use the method recommended, I have a hard time follow the ‘red-line’ through the current article (related to the bullet point above).
    • Perhaps write a ‘sub-conclusion’ within each chapter of the current article, to relate that given chapter to the main subject.
      • I changed some of the chapters to make it more understandable

A single proofread and adding of the ‘red-line’ throughout the article will make it a nice and well-defined article! …Of course you need to finish it as well... ☺ happy writing and read you later!

Thank you for helpful and good comments :)

[edit] Reviewer 2: S141543

  • This is an interesting idea to write about
    • Nice that you like it
  • I do not understand what sentence two in the abstract means, possibly it should be re-written
    • I agree it was badly made, now it is changed
  • Otherwise, the abstract looks good to me
    • Thanks
  • Project management chapter seems to be more about a specific project than the concept of project management
    • I modified it to make it more clear
  • The planning section is well done in my opinion
    • Ok
  • Could come up with an example of a decision that has to be made in the decision making phase.
  • The article needs references
    • Added them
  • The word structure in the article is a little confusing at times
    • I changed then and tried to make it better
  • I do realize that this article is a work in progress
    • It was :)

[edit] Reviewer 3: Lea

  • You are following the method article. Unfortunately, I am not able to follow the thread of your article. I am not sure if you are done writing yet, but in my opinion there has to be a higher focus on where you want to lead the reader.
    • I have made changes now
  • The subject sounds interesting and it applies to the course. As mentioned above the structure could hace more precision and guidance in order for the article to have more meaning.
  • Grammar is good. Some sentences are too long for me (personally) to read. Maybe split some of the sentences to let the reader understand the text better.
    • I agree and changed some of the sentences.
  • The figures you have used correspond to the text and make sense.
    • Ok
  • Concerning the length, you are on a good way, but there is still room left to fill around 3000 words.
    • I have added length on it
  • The abstract has a good length but does not give clarity about the article. Maybe try to explain the table of contents to the reader.
    • I made minor changes to that but not much
  • Sources and Annotated bibliography: Up to now there are no sources. Make sure to add sources in order to avoid plagiarism.
    • Those have been added
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