Talk:Organisational resilience with mindfulness

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Josef: Hello, thank you for an interesting proposal. I really like the idea. Please make sure to go back to the original literature (e.g. Weick, see our whitepaper), and also follow the "Method" structure we propose. Also please make sure that you do not end up writing about "organizational resilience" in general, but making projects more resilient.


Review 1, s150621

• Interesting topic

• Nice that you give a description of the content of the article in the abstract

• The table with the 5 principles is clear and straight forward, good with examples for each principle


• The abstract should be before the contents

• Some of the sentences could be written easier, or described better, as for example this sentence: “Thorough management is crucial in resilient organisations (check ref, Geraldi et al, 2009) and mindfulness encompass the risk of the human mind.”

• In the article you refer to many books, which is very good. The reference should consistently be done in wiki style, with footnotes. One example is the sentence; “Weick and Sutcliffe(2001) describe mindfulness as “a rich awareness of discrimatory detail”.”, where you don´t use the footnote reference style

• It is nice that the article includes figures, but remember text for describing the figures, and to add the source of the figure

• The application paragraph ends with a question, which I suggest rather to put into the discussion. Some alternatives for the answer of the question would also be nice to add to the discussion.


• Can see that you are not finished yet, but so far it looks interesting, and I look forward to read the rest when you are finished

Review of Sorth90 (Rasmus Sorth-Olsen s117422), Reviewer 2

  • The feedback was given on Tuesday 22-09-2015 at 5 PM.
  • The article is not finalized.
  • Several sections are not written.
  • It would have been an advantage if the article had described what “Organisational resilience with mindfulness” is and how the tools are applied and why. It would have made it easier for the reader to get an overview and at the same time find the information the reader is looking for.

Abstract:

  • From the abstract, the article seems interesting.
  • Who is seeking sociotechnical?

Big idea:

  • Good language.
  • Good use of sources.
  • What section tell the reader?

5 Principles:

  • References.
  • Lacking a description of the figure.
  • Good shape. The figure is not complete.

Application:

  • Using an example. Thus the reader understand better the section.
  • More in-depth description of Butler & Gray.
  • Do you have a reference for the figure?


  • The rest of the article is missing, to be written.

Reviewed by s152093, review 3

  • I know that the article isn’t done, but here are a few comments.
  • Since you talk a lot about cognitive biases and resilience I think it would make sense to introduce the terms.
  • The language is clear and there is a natural flow.
  • It would be nice to see examples of fields where mindfulness would be very useful, and fields where it wouldn’t make sense to apply the techniques.
  • Don’t forget to make the annotated bibliography where you write about each reference.
  • The table gives a quick and clear overview.
  • The picture is nice, but don’t forget to include it in the text.
  • In general a really good idea. I’m looking forward to read the final version of the article :-)
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