Talk:Systems Engineering versus Project Management, a comparative study

Feedback by Lasse Madsen

Fist impression:

• The article is very well structured, and invites the reader to read along.
• The grammar and spelling is very good, and the content is easy to understand due to the structure and grammar. I would though, suggest to add additional "," where sentences get long. Especially moving towards the end of the article.

Formal aspects

• I would put the introduction before the content to provide a read threat.
• I miss some more WIKI formatting, ie.
  • Categories: [[Categories:Management]]
  • References to other wiki sites: [[project management]]
  • Figures could alternatively be in the right hand side in stead of as part of the text. The problem is, that if you have a small screen, the figures will go out of the screen. Code: [[File:FILENAME.png‎|200px|thumb|right|FIGURE TEXT]]
  • I miss figure text. Could be solved by the method above.
• I would consider to use the references more than once like: this , then the same reference could be used here and here and even here as well :-). (look into the code of this to see how it could be done, if you are interested.
• Maybe include figure references, if the figures is not reproduced by the author of the article.

Content aspects

• The article clearly relates to the course, and provides a good overview of methods of systems enginnering vs. project management.
• I would have enjoyed to read examples of uses of the V-model and how this could help practioneers in relations to other models.
• I like that the author of the article finishes off with reflections of practise.

Abstract

• The sentences get very long. Consider some more "," and "."
• You could refer to other WIKI articles like this: Project Management (Code: [[Project Management]])

Introduction to mindset and framework

• The section contains very long statements like this one: "Project management is considered both a profession and a generic discipline for managing projects, applicable for all kinds of organisations and all types of projects. Project management as a discipline offers an integrated set of processes and methods which – if applied correctly and as intended – will support the project manager in his effort to control and manage the activities of his project, regardless of the specific field, scope or organisation involved.Characteristic of Project Management is the focus on management processes and their integration." -And i can't really figure out where this is from, if you wrote it your self or which source you have it from. Could you add sources to statements and paragraphs like these?
• Should the following sentence be in italic as the other definitions?: "is defined as: an integrated set of elements, subsystems, or assemblies that accomplish a defined objective. These elements include products (hardware, software, firmware), processes, people, information, techniques, facilities, services, and other support elements. [6]"
• Is it possible to add a section where you state: Who uses what, (like: System enginering is mainly used by: x, y, and z and Project management ....)

Comparing Project Management and Systems Engineering

• There is only one reference in the whole section, consider adding more.
• The formulation: "When searching the internet" is in my opinion not very academic, maybe consider rewriting.
• Would it be an idea to give some examples after the following sentence: "you also find a number er of different companies and industries offers "their own" project management model, and at lot of them resembles the Systems Engineering lifecycle more than that of PMI." Examples are 1, 2, 3 and 4, where ...

Reflections on practice

• I miss some more direct links to particularly discussed subjects from the article.

Used for reference example

Formel aspects

• I am not certain what you are doing in this sentence - maybe it just isn't finished? "a system of ... engineering items working together" under The domain of Project management.

• "Project management is the application of knowledge, skills, tools, and techniques to project activities to meet the project requirements ... Project management is accomplished through the appropriate application and integration of ... project management processes, [2]" This ones is written both in italic and normal text - does that mean you wrote some of it or is it all quotes ? (and why does it end with a , ?)

• There is only minor errors, that mostly seems like typos, so I am quite certain you can find them yourself when you re-read it before the final delivery.

• It might be a good idea to name the tables, so it is absolutely clear which one you are talking about in the text.

• From looking in the Week 13 - Wiki article peerview description I will have to ask; the V-figures you are using, did you make them yourself or did you borrow them from somewhere? In case of the latter, were you allowed to borrow them?

Content aspects

• It was mentioned today by Christian that he would prefer not to use the word abstract, but in stead summary - and that it would be a good idea to explain why this article is relevant to for example companies.

• I will admit I do not know enough about this subject, to say if you are missing any important points - but all together it seems like a very good article to me.

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Response to feedback from Choko

Thanks for your thorough review and proofreading. I will respond to your comments bullet by bullet:

• I am not certain what you are doing in this sentence - maybe it just isn't finished? "a system of ... engineering items working together" under The domain of Project management.

I'm just trying to short the quotation by leaving out the less important words and sentences. Obviously it does'nt work for you as a reader, I will consider stating the complete citation instead

• "Project management is the application of knowledge, skills, tools, and techniques to project activities to meet the project requirements ... Project management is accomplished through the appropriate application and integration of ... project management processes, [2]" This ones is written both in italic and normal text - does that mean you wrote some of it or is it all quotes ? (and why does it end with a , ?)
• There is only minor errors, that mostly seems like typos, so I am quite certain you can find them yourself when you re-read it before the final delivery.
• It might be a good idea to name the tables, so it is absolutely clear which one you are talking about in the text.
• From looking in the Week 13 - Wiki article peerview description I will have to ask; the V-figures you are using, did you make them yourself or did you borrow them from somewhere? In case of the latter, were you allowed to borrow them?