Talk:Olympic Games London 2012: When the client strives for innovation (The London model)

Kristine: Very interesting project to look into. As it is a huge project it is easy to get sidetracked. If you have not already done this, it might be helpful for yourself to have a clear idea of what the red thread of this case is going to be, before you start to go into the different aspects. Very nice to see you have the structure figured out nicely.

s150794, Reviewer 1

Overall:

• My first impression of this article is that it has a good structure and is informative. The language is good and the images suitable to the pharagahphs.
• The abstract has a good introduction to the event.

Suggestions of improvements:

• It may be a bit hard to read, since it is a lot of text. A tip may be to divide it a bit with some “under headlines” (I see you have some, but you could include it in the list of contents), make more paragraphs, or put in some more photos.

Answer: I agree with you. It was among the important problems that I wanted to improve, as the great amount of information was difficult to be handled in a structured way. I hope I managed to solve this problem by adding headlines and illustrations to make it more clear

• Some sentences that where a bit long, which made it a bit hard to follow. A tip is to either divide of rewrite the sentences. An example:
  • “The outcome of their effort, which was evaluated not only in relation to the conduction of the Games, but also to the urban regeneration of various deprived neighbourhouds and the planning of the future use of the venues, was considered succesful and provided them with great industry awards.”

Answer: Thank you for the suggestion, I think I improved some of them

Sarac Reviewer 2

First impression:

• There is not much to say about this article then well done!
• Great introduction to topic. I god inspired by the abstract to continue my reading. The language is formal but easy to understand and follow.
• Interesting topic and easy to read text.

Formal aspects:

• The article follow ”the case study” structure of article and that is very easy to understand. The article covers the expected structure completely.
• No grammatical errors or misspellings.
• The two figures are clear, easy to follow and understand and referenced in the text.
• The article is formatted properly as a wiki-style article should.

Content aspects:

• The topic of the article is well sorted for practitioners in project, program and portfolio management tasks and I think that it will be used as a source for many reports to come.
• The length of the article in it’s current conditions is about 2100 words which is not the required amout but if taking into consideration that the author states in the article that two sections isn’t finished we can only assume that these sections will contribute to the article fulfilling the 3000 words requirement.
• Very easy to read. The text is consistently fluent and the “same” language is used throughout the article.

Notes for changes:

• Don’t forget to add the reference list and the resources. It’s important to also add a small description of each reference so that the reader can follow the sources and access what is needed.

Answer: Thank you very much for the comments, I added the references and I think they are clear and uderstood

S150801 Reviewer 3

Overall impression

I see that you have not finished your 5 and 6 chapter, so I will not comment on those.

• I think the article looks clean and it is nice to read.
• It is a big topic, but I think you narrow it down really well.
• I feel like it is giving a nice overview of the Olympics and its challenges.

Rooms for improvement

• In such a big topics I feel like you can use your references more often. But since I can’t see the material you have used, it is a bit difficult to say if I am correct.

Answer: Thank you for the suggestion. As the article wass not finished in its draft form, I think I added more references and now it is clear

• The Illustrations are really good, but is it your own? Or do you have copyright to use them?

Answer: Very important comment, only one illustration is mine (wass not included in the draft form), so yes of course I had to add references. It is just I did not add them during the draft form

• Since it is a big topic, I would have liked to have more under topics. Just to keep it easier to follow. I fell of a couple of times

Otherwise the article and the structure is good
Answer: I agree with you, I tried to add some of them, I hope it became more easy to follow