Talk:Minimizing Risk and Uncertainties in Construction Projects
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* The first impression of the article is good. | * The first impression of the article is good. | ||
* In the beginning of the article you could write how the article is structured. This will make the article more reader-friendly | * In the beginning of the article you could write how the article is structured. This will make the article more reader-friendly | ||
| − | * In some places are the articles language and | + | * In some places are the articles language and grammar hard to understand and this needs to be improved because it removes the focus. |
* You should start every section with a short description of why this section is important. For example is the ”Risk and Uncertainty” section starting with what is important and not why it is important. It would be more easy to understand the different sections if you can write 1-2 lines of why it is important to manage. | * You should start every section with a short description of why this section is important. For example is the ”Risk and Uncertainty” section starting with what is important and not why it is important. It would be more easy to understand the different sections if you can write 1-2 lines of why it is important to manage. | ||
* You are also using a lot of bullets which gives a good overview but in some places you could use more bullets. For example in the transformation, flow and value section are you describing three concepts without bullets. This can make it difficult to compare the three concepts and make an overview. | * You are also using a lot of bullets which gives a good overview but in some places you could use more bullets. For example in the transformation, flow and value section are you describing three concepts without bullets. This can make it difficult to compare the three concepts and make an overview. | ||
Revision as of 20:00, 22 September 2015
Kristine: Minimizing risk is an interesting subject. Do try not to spread over too many subjects at once as it will not allow you to go enough in debt with each of them. Do consider what tool it is especially important for you to explain as this should have your main focus. The Main page is helpful to look at when you need to structure the article.
Reviewer 2: AndreasAndersen
- The first impression of the article is good.
- In the beginning of the article you could write how the article is structured. This will make the article more reader-friendly
- In some places are the articles language and grammar hard to understand and this needs to be improved because it removes the focus.
- You should start every section with a short description of why this section is important. For example is the ”Risk and Uncertainty” section starting with what is important and not why it is important. It would be more easy to understand the different sections if you can write 1-2 lines of why it is important to manage.
- You are also using a lot of bullets which gives a good overview but in some places you could use more bullets. For example in the transformation, flow and value section are you describing three concepts without bullets. This can make it difficult to compare the three concepts and make an overview.
- The figures gives a good understand of the theory but the figures are small and are of poor quality. You should try to make the quality better and make the figures larger.
- It is good that you have different types of references.
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s150799 reviewer nr.3
Overall impression:
- There is a lot of interesting information and theories.
Improvement areas:
- For me, the structure was a bit confusing and made it hard to understand when and where different subject was discussed. For example are the sections about “transformation, flow and value” under Lean construction, or are this an independent theory?
- Always explain abbreviations before using it.
- The grammar makes the article a bit challenging to read.
- In the overview you state that you are going to discuss BIM in Lean, but I cannot see that this has been done.
- Remember to make links to other Wiki articles and an annotated bibliography section.
Suggestion of improvement:
- Instead of an own overview section, you could have an abstract before the contents.
- For the structure you could be more clear when and where you are talking about different theories. There was no clear difference between facts and the use of the tools.
- It would make the flow of the article much better if you looked at conjugation of words and the sentence structure. There are some sentences that don’t make sense because of the wrong use of words. For example “outlooks”, when I think you wanted to write “outcome”. And try to refer to someone or something when you start the sentence with “it, that or this”, then it is easier to understand what you mean.
