Talk:BIM as a project management tool on construction projects

Revision as of 20:07, 22 September 2015

Anna: Very nice topic choice that fits both the requirements for the type of article and the desired structure! Look forward to reading more about this tool.

Reviewer 1: AndreasAndersen

• The first-hand impression of the article is very good and very reader-friendly. The many small headlines makes the article very clear.
• The beginning of the article starts first with a description of how the article are structured and afterwards a short introduction to the topic. I would consider to start with the short introduction to the topic because the first thing a viewer are reading in an article should be appetiser so the reader will continue reading.
• The figures in the article are understandable and looks nice. But remember to specify the figure names under the figures in the same word. Right know are Figure xx or Fig xx being used. Try to choose either Figure or fig. It will not be so confusing and looks better.
• When describen figure 2 it is done out of the character´s 9 points but not in the same order as in the figure. That can be a bit confusion. For example are the points ”HR” and ”Communication” side by side in the figure but ”HR” is described in the beginning of the section and ”communication” is written in the end of the section. This should be changed so the order of the text and figure fits.
• There is a table in the middel of the article. The table should also have a table number and table name in order to refer to the table in article.
• Comparing the topic of the article to other topics like Gannt Chart and Work Breakdown Structure gives a good understanding of the subject compared to methods.
• In the discussion section you haven´t been writing anything yet. It would be useful if you could write about how this model could be compared to other models in the same industries and its advantages and disadvantages. The article has about 2.500 words and therefore their should be enough words to desribe this.
• It is positive that there are a lot of different references including a reference to the ISO 21500 standard.

s150799 reviewer nr.2

Overall impression:

• The structure of the article is very good; it is easy and interesting for the reader. It guides the reader well, and I was left with a good understanding of the life cycle of BIM.
• It was smart to narrow the examples to the construction industry.
• The language has good flow and there is nothing to improve in this point.
• There is good discussion of limits and benefits throughout the text.
• Good references to the figures and other Wiki articles.

Improvement areas:

• In the background section it says: “Despite the benefits, the use of BIM as a project management tool is still in the early stages of development, and there are still many challenges and barriers associated with its use.” I felt that this question about barriers and challenges was not answered in the text. But maybe this will come in the limitation section that is missing.
• The pictures are a bit small, so the text is hard to read.

Suggestion of improvement:

• As this is an explanation of a project management tool, I do not think that it is necessary to add a case study. I can see that it is an unwritten point in your content.
• Since you discuss the use and benefits in the section “utilisation of BIM”, and has planned a “limitation” section, I do not see the need of the “discussion and conclusion” section. This could be to just repeat what has already been said.
• Remember the annotated bibliography required.